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Re: Dear Those Who have come to me
Hello there, Isha! I have finally figured out what I'm viewed as in life. Good start. I actually have to read this twice, trying to find out a mistake, it ...
May 21, 2010 -
Re: Azaleas for Susie
Hello there! Great piece. I was going to nitpick or critique this but then I noticed... hmm... there are no grammar mistakes or anything that needs to be corrected. :wink: ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: Lamp
Hello there! Wonderful poem. :D It was short but really good. I like it how your formatting makes a "lamp" figure. I could get the message through the poem. One ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: A Friendship Worth Saving
Hello there! Interesting story. As what others stated, you're good at dialogues. It makes your story a little bit realistic and was understandable from the start until the end. You ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: Black Sands (rewrite)
Hello there! The sun blazed high in the sky, the waves crashed gently against the rocks and the sand turned black! nice description and a good start :) It was ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Mary-Rose
Hello there! This is very interesting. I could see the message behind the poem. First of all, your rhyming scheme was good, some parts though were kind of forced, just ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Moment
Hello there! I totally like this! :D It wasn't expressive to the point that you are really crazy for one person but it really tells how much you cared for ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Love [edited]
Hello there! This is like a random short love story but I like it. :) Matt paced through the corridors of his mind. A good start in here. Maybe rephrase ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Love Hurts
Hello there, Ikafe! This lyric's totally emotional and deep for one whose heart became broken. I love the flow, the feelings going on and on. It slaps you, It kicks ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: "It's the Rules!"
Hello there! Here to review. :wink: Errors in red. Comments in blue. Wee woo wee woo wee woo P.J. ran around the living room making firetruck noises, drowning out the ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: Love Has No Boundaries (I) {EDITED*}
Hello there, Shubhi! Here to review as requested. Many reviews have pretty covered up all those mistakes already so I won't bother with it anymore. I'll just have to comment ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: Saved on the Killer Mountain- Chapter One
Hello there! Here to review as requested. :mrgreen: Characters: I like how you portray your two main characters differently to each other. Also, it was kind of a biblical name. ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: A Dream for You
Hello there! I really like your lyrics. It' so sweet. I like how you placed a rhyme scheme in it. My only nightmare is losing you. But you're my dream ...
May 15, 2010 -
Re: Seems Like Eternity
Hello there, Shubhi! Here to review as requested. :D “You should take them now. I’ll give those to you (delete space) . (space here) Wait here,” she had a command ...
May 15, 2010 -
Re: Misty Eyes: Chapter One
Hello there! Here to review as requested. :wink: Wings fluttered and shimmered, (space here) outfits sparkled and faces glowed on what everyone, including the bride-to-be, hoped would be her last ...
May 15, 2010
