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Re: Chapter 3 Million Dollar Man
Hello hello! I hope you're having a good day/night. To start this off, I'm going to mention on big critique for this chapter. I'm going to be pasting it down ...
Nov 9, 2023 -
Re: The Drawer
Hello hello! I hope you're having a good day/night. The biggest critique I have with this story is the first two paragraphs. It had been a while since I had ...
Nov 7, 2023 -
Re: V.S.L. (Vampire Spy League) (Part One)
Hello hello! I hope you're having a good day/night. For starters, you're presenting a really unique idea here. The whole concept of an organization harming their own people to do ...
Nov 7, 2023 -
Re: Chapter 2 Mayday Mayday
Hello again! I'm back again for another review. The missiles honed in on the light cruiser, the U.S.S. Maxwell. The twin projectiles struck the port side near the deck, resulting ...
Nov 7, 2023 -
Re: Chapter 1 L.E.G.I.O.N
Hello! I hope you're having a good day/night. I think one of the biggest ways to improve this chapter is to separate part one and part two into separate chapters, ...
Nov 6, 2023 -
Re: Sinister Magick -Chapter 5: Realm Seekers
Hello Leya! I have been waiting for the next chapter, and I'm excited to finally have some free time to read and review! I unfortunately want to start this review ...
Nov 5, 2023 -
Re: The Gift and the Ghostspeaker (Chapter One)
Hello! I hope you’re having a good day/night. Please allow me some grace this go around as I don’t have access to my computer and have to do this on ...
Nov 4, 2023 -
Re: The Gift and the Ghostspeaker (Prophecy Poem + Prologue)
Hello hello! I hope you're having a good day/night. I've been meaning to review this for the past day now. Alas, the procrastination beast reared its ugly head... For starters, ...
Nov 3, 2023 -
Re: Sinister Magick- Chapter 4: Sinister Reading
Hello Leya! I hope you're having a good day/night. As I have started writing this, this is still in the green room, so let's do something about that :) I’m ...
Nov 2, 2023 -
Re: Sinister Magick- Chapter 3: Perfume & Alcohol
Hello Leya! I hope you're having a great day/night. My hearing clears back up as Edris finishes up whatever he was saying, “—and why do you need her anyways? Shouldn’t ...
Nov 2, 2023 -
Re: Sinister Magick- Chapter 2: A Deal with a Goddess
Hello Leya! I hope you're having a good day/night. I stayed still and silent when the police entered my home. Tears streamed from my eyes. Edris talked to them; told ...
Nov 2, 2023 -
Re: Sinister Magick - Chapter 1: Reality
Hello Leya! I hope you're having a good day/night. I hate to sound like a broken record here, but definitely make sure to watch out for switching tenses. This can ...
Nov 1, 2023