Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language, violence, and mature content.
Chapter 3: Perfume & Alcohol
This is the first time in a long time that Edris and I spoke during a car ride. His voice became muffled as I focused on the trees passing me; the crisp leaves had turned a beautiful shade of orange within the past week. I can’t take them in, the moon and darkness are covering them up as if I don’t deserve to experience it.
My hearing clears back up as Edris finishes up whatever he was saying, “—and why do you need her anyways? Shouldn’t we go pick up Sybil and tell her what’s going on?”
“I need that lady,” I grunt, pulling my journal from my purse and putting it on my lap, “She could find my brother. When we see Sybil, I will tell her what’s going on.”
“What does your brother have to do with any of this?” He stops the car, snapping his neck to look at me with a grimacing expression, “Is there something you’re not telling me? You’re being awfully quiet. Not saying much. It’s kind of freaking me out.”
“You wouldn’t understand,” I keep my eyes focused on the cover of my journal, “It was something I did in high school. Stupid mistake. I was young, dumb, and oh so selfish. Now it’s coming back to bite me in the ass. And as for the tarot lady; I haven’t used my magic in a while. I’m rusty. I’d rather her help us.”
His eyes widen and he grabs my hand, for the first time in three years. It’s been three years since he’s touched me in any intimate way, and as you get older; you deal with it. I finally feel like we both have something to mourn, and grief to share. This is the only thing we have in common.
“Ugh,” he removes his hand from mine abruptly and throws both of them down on the steering wheel, “This is what I get for marrying a witch, I guess.”
There it is. There’s the shallow, inhumane, disgusting attitude that I’ve lived with for ten years. I knew it was too good to be true. My eyes narrow on him, “Stop that, and continue driving. We don’t have much time.”
“What do you mean, ‘we don’t have much time’?” Edris snaps, gently pressing on the gas pedal.
The concerned expression on his face softens my voice, “The less you know, the better. I shouldn’t have told you.”
“This is my son we’re talking about. My kin,” a tear drops from his cheek as he speaks, landing on his left thigh, “I care about him too.”
Edris is right. He’s his son too. This magic, though, this world… it’s too complicated for him to understand. It would take months, even years, to explain just the basics. Our world is different from his, we stay hidden; judged by the outside world as if we aren’t also human.
Growing up as a witch was the hardest thing I’ve ever done. That’s why I go so easy on Sybil because I know exactly how it changes you. It’s something you can’t put into words-- discovering magic.
I remember when I first told Sybil she was a witch. She was in her room, playing with her Barbies, when all of a sudden, the head of one of them flew off, hitting the wall in front of her. I was reading my novel when I heard the bang. I ran into her room, and noticed how her face was pale—ghastly even, and her decapitated doll’s head was laying on the floor in front of her. It was traumatizing for an eleven-year-old girl.
After explaining to Sybil that she was a witch, she embraced it. She wasn’t mortified like me; she didn’t feel lost. That’s how I knew she was more like my mother than I’d thought. She is brave, fearless, and independent—but she’s still my little girl.
“I understand that,” I respond to Edris, blowing a strand of hair from in front of my face, “When I was young, shortly before I met you, my brother passed. He was killed by a dark witch, using dark magick. I didn’t know what to do. I made a deal with Hecate, in return for another soul, to bring him back.”
Edris’ face goes completely white. He begins sobbing uncontrollably, as if he thinks our son is gone forever. That doesn’t help me, doesn’t make me feel better, and now I feel even worse about the whole thing. I’ve tore myself up about it enough. I’m acting on it.
I’ve never seen Edris cry since I’ve known him.
We slowly pull into the street of the psychic’s house. I sigh heavily once he parks and grab my purse. I open the car door and place my feet on the pebbled driveway. It’s colder out today, and I noticed when we walked out of our house—but everything is so overwhelming that I didn’t even mention it.
The psychic’s house is small, homey, and vibrant. She has dark blue chairs on her porch, and a sign to the left of them that read ‘PSYCHIC’.
Edris trails behind me as I walked. I could sense him wiping away the tears from his face, and I noticed his face was puffy from crying earlier as well.
I knock on the door and peek through the window. The outline of wooden cabinets, paintings, and candles shine through, and light footsteps head towards the knock.
“Who’s there?” It sounded like a woman’s voice, but not quite as old as the one that lives here. Maybe her daughter or granddaughter.
“I’m looking for the Rosalie, my name is Minerva and I’m here with my husband, Edris,” I sightly shout back at her.
“Edris?” She opens the door. I wasn’t bothered by the fact that she was so confident with saying my husband’s name, but I was bothered by her odor. She smells of really heavy perfume, and liquor. She looks to be about my age, or a few years younger, and she’s wearing black jeans and a black blouse—her golden hair braided down to her waist. I could tell she was a witch as well; I could sense energy radiating all around her.
“If this is a bad time—,” Edris started, but the lady cut him off.
“No, certainly not,” She opens the door wider for us; an invitation inside.
I hesitate, but step forward, Edris following.
“Mother is a little bit drowsy today, but I’m sure she’ll be happy to see you, Edris,” She turns to me and holds out her hand, “My name is Nina. Nice to meet you, Minerva, I’ve heard a lot about you,” She smiles and walks upstairs quickly; I’m guessing to grab her mother.
Heard a lot about me? Could this be the woman Edris is seeing?
I glance around me, the candlelight soothing my anxiety filled blood, and take a seat at the dining table. The wallpaper is old, maybe from the 50’s, and the air smelled of rosemary and sage. The only rancid smell was Nina herself. Edris places himself next to me and we patiently wait.
Nina and Rosalie come walking down the stairs, Nina balancing her mother with her hand. As they reach the bottom, Rosalie’s eyes light up when her gaze connects with Edris.
What is this connection that they have? I started longing for that type of intimacy from him.
Edris smiles at her and stands back up and she throws herself into his arms, “You haven’t aged a bit, young man,” she says, pulling back and studying his face with her hands.
“Neither have you,” He jokes, gesturing for her to take a seat.
Rosalie laughs and her eyes move to me, and her smiles slightly fades. It’s clear it was now not genuine.
“Who have you brought?”
“This is my… wife, Minerva,” he says. For some reason, his pause before ‘wife’ kind of bothered me. Why did he hesitate?
I flash a quick smile, “Nice to meet you. How do you know each other?”
“Tea?” Nina pops her head out of the kitchen.
“I’m okay,” I reply, and Edris nods, “I’ll take some.”
“Why are you here?” Rosalie asks Edris, completely ignoring my question. Now I was even more bothered, could I possibly be in my husband’s mistress’ house?
No. He wouldn’t bring me here.
“My son,” He says, “He is missing. My wife says it started from a bargain she has with… Hecate, in exchange for a life. We need you to find her brother, if possible. He’s the only one that could possibly find him.”
“Oh, sweet thing,” She purrs, caressing her crystals that are laid out on the table, “You never make deals with entities.”
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Hello Leya! I hope you're having a great day/night.
I'm glad someone mentioned Sybil in terms of this whole situation. Edris doesn't seem to be the best guy, but he has enough sense to mention his daughter. I wonder how she will feel about the news of her brother taking forever to get back to her. When he mentioned that Malichi was his son too, I kind of felt a little bad for him. Is that the right emotion to be provoked from that? Him crying uncontrollably when Minerva told him the truth seems out of character for him, but situations like that can make lots of people act out of character. It's nice to see a male character show his emotions in such a way, that's not very represented much.
Ooooooo man. I hope that this isn't the case, because if so, the audacity! Hopefully it's just him reaching out to other witches in an attempt to understand his wife better. I can kind of see him having too much pride to go to Minerva herself. I'll stay hopeful about it. Edris seems to be a very complex character with lots of sides to him, but he doesn't seem like the guy to introduce his wife and mistress to each other when his son is actively missing. Minerva has enough to worry about!
That last sentence was killer too - it's mysterious and a wonderful cliffhanger to lead into the next chapter. I'm super excited to see what Minerva finds out from this reading, and maybe also why Edris knows these women so well. There are so many questions I've formed from this chapter that I'm eager to have answered. Happy writing!
I’m back for yet another chapter! It’s rainy and windy outside for me right now so I’m ready for all the cosy vibes of Salem (scary child snatching notwithstanding of course).
Let’s get into the review!
I’m glad we’ve got mention of Sybil in this chapter. I’m surprised she wasn’t more top of mind before Minerva started coming up with reasoning as to why her son has been taken. It’s hard because we don’t know the relationship she has with her daughter beyond what’s been mentioned so far so I don’t know whether this is in or out of character for her.
Edris’ response is a little conflicting too. First he seems like he wants to comfort her by holding her hand then immediately complains about marrying a witch. Both responses are valid for him, but I’d like to see a clearer transition between them - what triggers him going from reacting one way to the next?
I like where the plot is headed for this and the characters you’ve inteoduced with Rosalie and Nina are definitely going to be interesting ones! I think some work needs to be done to establish the relationship between Minerva and her husband in terms of backstory and consistency. It’s unclear what Edris knew about Minerva before now and that would help with understanding how shocked he is with some of this.
Catch you for the next chapter!
Icy
I hope to learn more about what is going on in the next chapter. Minvera must be very lonely, from how she sees the world. Edris doesn’t know much about her, not in the slightest. Does her family know about Edris at all of only as much as he knows about Minvera? Perhaps so, perhaps no.
I’ll see to it to read the next chapter. I wish you a very Happy Halloween!
I'm still a'comin! Let's get right to it.
1. My overall thought is that this feels like half a chapter, or that the last chapter and this one should be merged. When Minerva explains the deals its both redundant, and give no new information. I would recommend keeping it vague in chapter two, quickly getting from journal to the car, and then explains Keenan's story here. It's the perfect excuse with them trapped inside the car and Edris wanting answers. This way the information comes through dialogue and we get to see more of a reaction to it.
2. Speaking of reactions, Edris'seemed a bit extreme. I mean, I'm not a parent yet, but when I put myself in his shoes I don't see many men sobbing uncontrollably. That may just be me though, so feel that one out as you get reviews.
3. What I do like is the paranoia of Nina that Minerva has, and how Edris's actions can easily be construed between secretive and totally oblivious, with both being equally possible xD
4. I'm a bit curious why Edris knows Rosalie and Nina while Minerva doesn't, but at the same time seems fairly caught off guard by a lot of the witch stuff. I'm not really understanding what he does and doesn't know about witchcraft, especially with Minerva wanting to keep him in the dark.
5. I have a question about Sybil as well. I thought in chapter 1 it said she was seventeen, but that Minerva and Edris were married as teens and have been married for ten years. Maybe I did the math wrong but that seems very creepy.
That's all for here. This ended abruptly so I'm going to continue with the next chapter right away.
~ Messy