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Re: Sore Wings Soaring
I loved that! :D It flowed really nicely and projected excellent images in my head. The words you used were vivid, poignant, and they keep repeating themselves over and over ...
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Re: Whisperings over Africa's plains (1)
I agree with Azila and canislupus :) This was interesting--it caught my attenion and held it until the end. It is rather short though... If you post more, I'll read ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: Go
I agree with BBB and Swirl Antara; you should use 'Why'd you go' less and change the last two phrases. This is very sad--but I like it too. Anyways, Keep ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: Music
The roar of the bass like waves on the shore caressing my face shattering my inner core [comment 1] The cry of the violin like the song of the eagle ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: Blood Song
Very nice! It's about the Twilight trilogy, right? I've read those books. They rock! The only thing that bothered me was that in places it sounded a bit stiff. Here's ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: Wild Heart
That was really cool! I love wolves--actually, I'm working on a story called 'Wolf Heart' :P Azila already mentioned all the things I noticed, so I haven't got anything, well, ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: In the Land of Harmony Chapter 1
Short, but very nice! Lovely descriptions! In the Land of Harmony By Summer Chapter 1 A Drop of Sun Across the room he sits, like a drop of golden sun. ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: He's So Gorgeous
Well...*frowns* It's definitely not my kind of poem--too, erm, soppy. Also, I couldn't help but notice that someone called Darren_Shan_fan wrote a poem that is very, very similar. The exact ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: Deleted
I'm sorry, but that was the most gruesome, horrific, gory thing I have ever read in my entire life. I actually felt sick reading that--cutting out people's eyes? Killing their ...
Nov 20, 2007 -
Re: A Heart's Deluge
(To that one girl, whose heart I've yet to win...) You once said to me you wish to lead A life of love and simplicity. All of these things I ...
Nov 19, 2007 -
Re: The Tides of Man
I really enjoyed that poem--the stanzas were simple, but I really felt the mood and could visualize it quite clearly. As usual, I have nothing helpful to say because a) ...
Nov 19, 2007 -
Re: Better off dead
Well, I have nothing even remotely constructive to say--everyone already mentioned the things I noticed. But anyways, great poem! I don't think it's emo...it's kind of, well, painful sounding? I ...
Nov 19, 2007 -
Re: To the end.
I don't know what's with all the double-spaces, and it was really short. To be brutally honest, this wasn't...well, it wasn't very good. You need to add alot more detail, ...
Nov 17, 2007 -
Re: -Missing Title-
One: The New Kid He gave me a crooked grin. My heart fluttered with excitement. He looked so gorgeous. This immediately made me think of 'Twilight'. You know, because Edwards ...
Nov 17, 2007 -
Re: Phantom ch. 1+ intro
My life was never really bad to begin with. My parents cared, i did well in school and I had lots of friends. I was very happy and I never ...
Nov 17, 2007
