Wesley

Okay naked girl in puke I am not sure about it! I think it is kind of a little boring and really doesn't get anywhere. The plot doesn't have time ...

I will give you props for attempting a western. These things haven't been made in a while. I love westerns! I sort of liked it it seemed to redundantly drag ...

Good Job Lindsay! I think the idea was great you set the scene up and gave us the big picture. But I think you could be a little more descriptive ...

I liked what you were trying to say but as they said it was a bit rushed. Also you have a lot of spelling errors. In the "Poll" you miss ...

Mean! ................................................. I didn't enjoy this at all. It is quite course, unrealistic, and just wrong. It is sad really we elected him why do we have beat him up ...

I think Kitty picked up most of the errors I saw. But the over all is fun and fast paced but I think it could be longer maybe. Anyway Good ...

First of all great work! This poem carries a lot of meaning and is fun to read. Okay you carry a good rhythm although you slip up in so me ...

Wow I like it! Your structure was great and your rythm was pretty much the same. I love your dramatically language very poetical. Reminded me of Shakespeare a little. The ...

Good Job Ash! lol As Lindsay said your rhyme was unique I kind of liked it. On the other hand your rythm was A little odd. It seemed very straight ...

Very poetical! lol Anyway I didn't find any structure really just jumbles sentences. Work on some of the rythm also. but a trip to the trash can This doesn't seem ...

Two words DELICIOUS! I love this poem! You set a good structure for this poem and an excellent rhyme scheme your descriptions also add to the poem. My favorite line ...

Wow that title threw me off! I have noticed most of your poems have a very sexual edge to them which is seen again through this poem it gives the ...

I won't go through the grammatical errors I will give that to some one else but be realistic . He has hasd a bunch of girlfriends he sees this girl ...

Honestly I did't like it that much. The characters really had no time to develope and it seems they jump right to it which is sort of unrealistic and not ...

I was very confused with this poem I really don't get it. His voice is sweet like honey, Smooth and delicious, Very descriptive. Filling me with sickly pleasures. Arms surround ...