Published October 12, 2007
I wrote you a letter full of beginnings
but everything about love has been said
and it felt inadequate
to put my heart on the line
and receive nothing in return
but a trip to the trash can
And when I saw that smile,
though only half-cracked,
speaking volumes of how you felt
I decided to just leave.
It’s easy and too often done
but it was a better choice
than having to read
the disappointment that you wrote
all in your face.
I wrote you a letter full of endings
and sealed it with a kiss,
knowing how you loathed that phrase,
and I mailed off my mistakes.
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This is really nice. I really don't have anything to say about it except that I had to read it over one or two times to really understand the meaning. It's not bad though. It could probably be better, but it's good.
Keep it up!
Lots O' Luv,
Lindsay
Very poetical! lol Anyway I didn't find any structure really just jumbles sentences. Work on some of the rythm also.
This doesn't seem to quite fit maybe try a different word choice.
But I really liked it very good word choices. And very deep sentences that really explain what you are trying to say. Very descriptive! Good Job! Nice Work!