WarriorVoice

I like this poem because often love is associated with red and pink and white, red for hearts and lips and blood, i guess, because love and life are connected ...

I am shocked and startled by almost made me cry. But that's a good thing! This script made me really think about how I treat my siblings. As the oldest ...

I thought this story was hilarious. I love Poe's Tell-Tale Heart, and you have done a good job retelling it. I love the moment when you stuff the cookie down ...

This is really good. I like your vivid verb use, like "floats", "twirl", "pulls", "gasps", "grips", etc. I also like how the relationship is described between the people by their ...

Hm. I like the concept, but the carrying out had a few problems. The plot is fine, even the dialogue is fine although you should consider taking SparkOfDoubt's suggestions below ...

This was very good. It reminded me of Fahrenheit 451 because of all the flamethrowing and the way the woman's memory was taken when she was converted, just like Mildred's ...

First, I think you should explain why the ocean is an "invisible" friend. If he lives by the ocean, then it's not invisible, unless you're saying he's blind. But since ...

I love this. The erratically placed capitals are one of the reasons, though, and if you sang it you couldn't hear those. So if you sing it be sure to ...

Neh, this song is so random. It sounds just like someone speaking. You said you'd written a song that wasn't about hate or death or love, and I think you ...

Hey octopi. I like the idea, about the guy just kinda traveling with a guitar and kinda failing because of practicalities like gas and money and doubt. But. You're going ...

Heh, can relate in a way. Okay, I've never had dated anyone so I've never had an ex, but... I've had crushes that I've tried to break free of, and ...

First, don't use the same word twice. Check a thesaurus if you need another word for large! Or try enormous, grand, huge, imposing, towering, or palatial. Even better, you could ...

To say "That girl doesn't have anything on me" sounds a little bit selfish. Sometimes people love other people for reasons no one can understand or see, not because one ...

So then...I am not quite sure what you are talking about, but I kind of like that. Adds some mystery. It feels like you're talking about someone old or tired ...