Virgil

Er, just a heads up, it's smart not to give out places of living as you've given out your name in this story and it would be safer if you ...

Oh, that makes much more sense! God I'm an idiot sometimes that was quite obvious >.>

Read your wall post before this, I'm sorry for that. I won't and I don't plan to.

I'm not going to apologize to you. And you just confirmed that this character is you, which I didn't know. I got a bit frustrated with it myself as I ...

If it's your writing, then you could've chosen to not post it. You can't yell at me when you were the one who posted it to get critiqued.

Oh, thanks. I actually felt like I had a right to review this as I have bipolar depression and general anxiety disorder.

nu i will not take dis

it sucked dont thank me u weeb D:

Haha, yeah, that definitely happens when I don't read the other chapters >.> will do sometime.

To add more horror or suspense to it, leave the monster with less dialogue and try not to be like "i'm gonna get you muahahahha rawr". And then another way ...

alright, we're good now xD

thanks for the review!

This wasn't really about the homeless xD, it was more about me asking around for people's pity. Thanks for the review!

What I meant by you having the period as a stylistic choice instead of not having more meant you had a lack of periods throughout the poem and only had ...

Yep c: