A Girl's Love Letter

Heya, TheColoroftheSky! Casanova here to do, yet again, another review! I'M ALMOST FINISHED! TWO MORE TO GO! I'm ECSTATIC! I honestly hope these help.. I feel as if I'm repeating the same things over and over and over again, and I hope that doesn't annoy you. I'm just sayin' what I think! Anyway, to the review!
The imagery, as usual, as always, is really good. I felt as if I was in the letter, in the world, and it touched me emotionally. That was amazing!
But, I do have a few nitpicks.
"Repetition impresses facts upon dull minds."
Lemme give you a few examples of where capitalization can help, as well as punctuation.

Say I had a few lines.
My dad gave me twenty dollars to get a book but instead I bought candy pizza and pop. You'd need periods between,"Candy, pizza, and pop," Right? Because without it it's incorrect and it would be too fast for an actual thought process.
So with that said- WORK ON IT MAN. I know you have this- you're very skilled and very talented! With your imagery, the correct flow, and the right punctuation you could be AMAZING! No kidding, honestly. I love your work- I can't believe I haven't reviewed it until now.

Anyway, when it comes to flow and ideals I'll leave this one alone. It seems pretty solid the way that it is, and I honestly love it.
But remember.
"Repetition impresses facts upon dull minds."
You'll get there~
Keep on doing what you're doing and keep on keeping on~
Your friend- Matthew Casanova Aaron.

Hi there! It's thecolorofthesky. I would like to write a little bit about my piece. This is my first poem I wrote by my own free will. When I wrote this I meant for it to be about my struggle with body image. In my poem the 'somebody' turns into 'some body', revealing the true meaning. It isn't intended to be a love letter in a romantic way. It was my way of trying to cleverly write about the way I wish I looked and to critique society's pressures on teen girls. The description is resembling that of a model or something I view as more than my own image. It is coming to piece with myself at the end. I'm sorry this was lost on the audience. I assumed it would be more successful in conveying the message because it was understood when shared in person with various friends. I hope this clarified. Thank you all for the reviews.

This is Yams here for a review on Review Day!

My first problem with this poem is that the lines are very same-y. A lot of the lines just end with a period instead of carrying on into another line with a comma or semicolon. It'd be nice to see some variation in punctuation. Another thing about the lines being very same-y is that they're all around the same general length and just repeat the same themes over and over again with different words.

It didn't feel like there was added to the love poetry genre or section.

The suggestion I always give everyone when writing romantic poetry, is that you really have to make it your own. Use personal experiences and add them into the poem so that it's unique from other love poems and can be better told apart. This is just another poem by anonymous, to anonymous, in the sense that anyone could've written this, in my opinion. It just gets boring, when that happens. It becomes like every other love poem. Make it your own.

I don't think you knew any ways to break up stanzas because you have none, but in between stanzas you could put a "~" so that everyone knows when a stanza stops and starts. It makes it a lot easier to figure out the structure and patterns.\

Every detail about my somebody

is stunning.

Ok, so, omg... Where do I begin! I am like in LOVE with this. The way you described your "person" is so detailed and loving, I feel as if I fell in love with your character. And I also love the hesitancy that I see on your part, because it's so true. When you get feelings for someone, you feel inadequate and small next to him because he's just so amazing and all that. It's so gorgeous and at fifteen too! Girl, I am impressed. In truth, I'm not very good at love poems, but I love reading them and this one was a read that I completely enjoyed. Congrats on your poems, welcome to YWS and if you need ANYTHING. Pm me, I'll be your friend! You are an amazing poet.- Cate.

wao! Absolutely amazing work, it's very beautifully composed. The choice of words are perfectly made and poetically used. you were able to pass across the message about who you love and how deeply you crave this person. i think there was some redundancies, too much repetition of the word "somebody", i guess u intended to create an effect with it. also i guess it's a typo "gorgeous" was wrongly spelled, just saying. the last parts of the poem seems confusing and difficult to understand tho, the transition from the first part to the last part was not properly portrayed, i think if you break it into stanzas, it'll be more easily comprehensible. beautiful poem though. i look forward to seeing more of these

wao! Absolutely amazing work, it's very beautifully composed. The choice of words are perfectly made and poetically used. you were able to pass across the message about who you love and how deeply you crave this person. i think there was some redundancies, too much repetition of the word "somebody", i guess u intended to create an effect with it. also i guess it's a typo "gorgeous" was wrongly spelled, just saying. the last parts of the poem seems confusing and difficult to understand tho, the transition from the first part to the last part was not properly portrayed, i think if you break it into stanzas, it'll be more easily comprehensible. beautiful poem though. i look forward to seeing more of these