Virgil

This is Kaos here for a review! I didn't really know what this classified as, but I guess that's why it's "Other". I'm going to just take it as it ...

This is Kaos here for a review! The little note at the end didn't really need to be there. Don't tell the reader how to interpret the poem D:, let ...

This is Kaos here for a review! The starting few paragraphs do a lot of rambling with the main character thinking a lot. I suggest instead of having this all ...

This is Kaos here for a review! Jumping right into the story without much background knowledge, so here I go! I thought that the tone you imbued with the beginning ...

This is Kaos here for a review! The thought that this is part one of a prologue terrifies me. Nobody will want to read your prologue that long if it's ...

This is Kaos here for a review! The first half of the chapter is mostly the main character rambling on with an excuse to because they're doing something, but it's ...

This is Kaos here for a review! So you have a sub-par poem at the start of this chapter and I don't really know why it's there? It doesn't really ...

This is Kaos here for a review! So my thoughts of this first chapter were very mixed, so let's get onto that. We start the chapter with rambling of the ...

This is Kaos here for a review! There's a lot of rambling at the start of the chapter especially with the large block of text. This is all the characters ...

This is Kaos here for a review! So this is a poem that solely builds up to the punchline for comedy. I don't really like these types of poems because ...

This is Kaos here for a review! So I'm assuming this is the first chapter out of 16 since there are 16 letters, but I could be wrong. Anyway, my ...

This is Kaos here for a review! There's a lot of grammar errors and punctuation problems running through the story, so I suggest you proofread through the story before you ...

This is Kaos here for a review! So probably my largest criticism is that this is the size of a novel chapter, and that's a crime. I usually don't like ...

This is Kaos here for a review! There's a lot of dialogue in this first chapter, and it's the first thing I want to touch on. It's something that I ...

This is Kaos here for a review! I didn't really find the imagery all that interesting in this poem? It's another horse poem, and that's about as much thought I ...