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567, Although I did enjoy reading this, it took awhile for me to actually get to the enjoyable part! I think the biggest issue I had with it was really ...

Hi Rascal, Interesting read. Here are a few thoughts: Watch your tense: L2: surroundING, L3: plunderED. Make sure you pick one tense and stick to it throughout the entire piece! ...

rememberme- This was actually kind of funny, as MamaLala said, because it's a rather unique view. I lot of times, the best poetry has a subject that is always overlooked ...

Jenny-- The message behind this is nice. It's strong, it's very teenage-angst-fighting-y. Which is good for this site and the people who are most likely going to read it. However. ...

Eric-- I actually quite like this! I like that it's not completely broken, but isn't exactly complete sentences. The imagery is great. Too often we see poems that don't do ...

Miral-- I think this is a good start to a possible poem. However, it's really not dramatic poetry--it's really just dramatic. There is such a thing as prose poetry, but ...

striving-- I like the concreteness of these poem. The small-big-small structure is kind of a cool idea. However, variety is sometimes your friend. There are a lot of "I hate ...

Hi Tim, I think that the idea behind this poem is inspirational, but maybe a little lost in the style. To me, this reads more like a rant that coincidentally ...

Hi katie-- Although I get that you were attempting to be blunt and vague, that's fine. However, this this poem being four lines long about such a subject, the reader ...

Hi theae-- This is certainly an interesting piece of writing, and welcome to YWS! We hope you're finding your way around okay! Now onto the poem: I honestly have no ...

Hi Grace-- There are a few things that are desperately needed before this powm can really be considered. Firstly, and certainly one of the most important, is punctuation. The way ...

Well this has pretty much been covered. Especially the punctuation and such...though this isn't in need of it as much as some other are. I wouldn't completely hate it if ...

Thank you Ari. This was beautiful. How dare she tell everyone? She didn’t know you or the two men in your convoy. How dare they show pictures of you—large images ...

Hi Valarie-- Please do not put your full name on the internet! These pages are viewable by anyone, and anyone can steal your name and look you up! We wouldn't ...

Hi Monstrar- Welcome to YWS! Please take a moment to look at the Rules & Guides . We do ask that you make two reviews of others work before posting ...