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  • Poetry » Horror, Humor
    Re: If You Can Fly

    Hi! This poem is wonderful. I really like this! As Tigerlilly37 mentioned, the poem is very well written and presented, especially having two characters speak to each other on either ...

    Jan 26, 2015

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: I'm Not A Monster

    Hi there! This is a nice poem. It could have been better, but I just wanted to first say that it is a nice poem. Though the "I'm not a ...

    Feb 1, 2013

  • Short Story » Fantasy, Dramatic
    Re: Cinderella

    Ha, what an interesting twist to it. I would review the little errors you had here and there, but time isn't on my side today, and I did promise to ...

    Dec 28, 2012

  • Poetry » Romantic, General
    Re: Afterglow

    Hello there! I'm TwistedMuffins, and I'm going to review your poem today. The first thing that got me off-guard as soon as this page opened, was that every first word ...

    Dec 27, 2012

  • Poetry » Fantasy, Dramatic
    Re: Sleeping Beauty

    Hello Macy! I'll have to agree with what everyone said. This has a very story/prose feel to it. You said your poem was heavily influenced by Carol Ann Duffy, and ...

    Dec 27, 2012

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Teen Fiction
    Re: Her.

    Hi there! First of all, welcome to YWS! Hope you enjoy it here! I think this poem of yours could use a structure. When there is no structure, and presented ...

    Jul 1, 2012

  • Poetry » Other, Other
    Re: Vanished

    Hi there! I've got a few things to point out. First things first; Punctuation! Punctuation can be really, really important. It can change the entire view, and one's perspective of ...

    Jun 24, 2012

  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic
    Re: The white paper

    Hi there! First off, spellings: (o) smmall I'm pretty sure this is just a typo, but either way, it's "small". (o) easly I think you mean "eas i ly". (o) ...

    Mar 28, 2012

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: In The Shower

    Hey there~ Now, when I read the first two paragraphs, I really thought you were just going to go on about taking a shower. But, I was quite pleased that ...

    Jan 13, 2012

  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General
    Re: The Inheritance Cycle: After a thousand years.

    Ash! You posted

    Jan 11, 2012

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Hs mind is

    Hey there! First of all, the title: I think there was a typo there. I think you meant "His" instead of "Hs"? (: The poem, as a whole: Well, the ...

    Jan 9, 2012

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Go to Hell (Part 1 of 2)

    Hi there! First of all, I love your style of writing. It seems very different, but in a good way. Also, as Audy said, the relation you showed between Bill ...

    Jan 7, 2012

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: The Carrot Bandit

    Buhahaha! I'm here! Eh-hm, anyways, First and second paragraph: I found it quite interesting. There was a nice rhyme to it, and it flowed pretty well. Though, I really wished ...

    Jan 6, 2012

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Danny

    Hey there! I shall be reviewing another one of your poems! The section you posted the poem: So when I read the title, I was slightly confused. The title gave ...

    Jan 5, 2012

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Christmas Eve

    Hi there! I really like your rhyme here. It seemed smooth enough for me! Though this part; Hark to this Christmas Eve; This year may be our last. The Christmas ...

    Jan 4, 2012


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