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Hi! This poem is wonderful. I really like this! As Tigerlilly37 mentioned, the poem is very well written and presented, especially having two characters speak to each other on either ...
Jan 26, 2015
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Hi there! This is a nice poem. It could have been better, but I just wanted to first say that it is a nice poem. Though the "I'm not a ...
Feb 1, 2013
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Ha, what an interesting twist to it. I would review the little errors you had here and there, but time isn't on my side today, and I did promise to ...
Dec 28, 2012
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Hello there! I'm TwistedMuffins, and I'm going to review your poem today. The first thing that got me off-guard as soon as this page opened, was that every first word ...
Dec 27, 2012
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Hello Macy! I'll have to agree with what everyone said. This has a very story/prose feel to it. You said your poem was heavily influenced by Carol Ann Duffy, and ...
Dec 27, 2012
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Hi there! First of all, welcome to YWS! Hope you enjoy it here! I think this poem of yours could use a structure. When there is no structure, and presented ...
Jul 1, 2012
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Hi there! I've got a few things to point out. First things first; Punctuation! Punctuation can be really, really important. It can change the entire view, and one's perspective of ...
Jun 24, 2012
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Hi there! First off, spellings: (o) smmall I'm pretty sure this is just a typo, but either way, it's "small". (o) easly I think you mean "eas i ly". (o) ...
Mar 28, 2012
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Hey there~ Now, when I read the first two paragraphs, I really thought you were just going to go on about taking a shower. But, I was quite pleased that ...
Jan 13, 2012
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Ash! You posted
Jan 11, 2012
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Hey there! First of all, the title: I think there was a typo there. I think you meant "His" instead of "Hs"? (: The poem, as a whole: Well, the ...
Jan 9, 2012
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Hi there! First of all, I love your style of writing. It seems very different, but in a good way. Also, as Audy said, the relation you showed between Bill ...
Jan 7, 2012
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Buhahaha! I'm here! Eh-hm, anyways, First and second paragraph: I found it quite interesting. There was a nice rhyme to it, and it flowed pretty well. Though, I really wished ...
Jan 6, 2012
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Hey there! I shall be reviewing another one of your poems! The section you posted the poem: So when I read the title, I was slightly confused. The title gave ...
Jan 5, 2012
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Hi there! I really like your rhyme here. It seemed smooth enough for me! Though this part; Hark to this Christmas Eve; This year may be our last. The Christmas ...
Jan 4, 2012