i sharpen my pencil, rip off a new sheet of paper
with him in mind i construct a smmall head
i add hair 2 eyes and a nose
a mouth. and some distinctive feature
i add a body, unique clothes
arms legs and a attitude to match
i choose the background and it comes in
a sun in the background, trees,a house
i pull a new paper, i give it a title to this world
i make a name for him. and slowly bring him to life
what shall he be, shy? tough? super? popular?
what dose he do, win a sport? save the world? save a girl?
my imagination influenced by music bleeds into my work
each happy feeling is dashed with a happy phrase,
each depressing note is scratched by a pain.
his life is easly influenced by my mood.
if only he knew. if only he realized.
that i was on the other side of the paper
makeing the hard desisions, the happy ones
just for other's entertainment.
dont call me god. for im far from it.
i do care about your future little man
but for the sake of the public i must inflict tragity
i must give them what they want.
its not that we like your pain. we want the victory.
the worse the tragity, the better the come back
it gives us all hope for our own tragity
so just know that whatever i do to you its for the best.
have no fear little guy. please dont fear
i wish you knew that no matter how bad it is
i can pull you outa anything.
i can have your accusers killed or appologize
as i set there stareing at the first paragraph unfinished
and my picture i made of him, sitting in pain.
i take a deep sigh and make one last appology,
hopeing that he could hear and understand.
and for that one second, he winked back.
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Hi there!
I'm pretty sure this is just a typo, but either way, it's "small".First off, spellings:
(o)
(o) I think you mean "easily".
(o) You mean "decisions", right?
(o) It is "making".
(o) Apologize. One 'p'.
(o) Again, one 'p'. Apology.
(o) Hoping.
(o) Staring.
Second, grammar:
(o) When you are using words such as "I" or "I'm" to talk about yourself, or what you are doing, the "I" should always be capital.
(o) When you are using a contraction such as "do not = don't", "I am = I'm", "Cannot = can't", an apostrophe is important.
(o) After a full-stop, there should be a capital. Eg: She wants some water. She prefers warm water.
(o) When a word starts with a vowel, and the previous word is "a", then the "a" changes to "an". For example: "Apple. An apple" Is correct, but "A apple" is wrong.
If you need more help, feel free to post on my wall. I hope I wasn't to harsh. You've got a good concept, and an interesting plot to the poem. You just need to brush up on your grammar.
thank you. I need this. I tend to get very lazy and just let my fingers glide.