This is really quite cool, isn't it?
I don't know why you have elected to start every line with S, but it's pretty interesting aesthetically, and it doesn't seem to hinder you at all; the lines you have are beautiful, really.
I feel like you were talking about some past, most likely first, love ("stars shine in the reflections of forgotten eyes"), but correct me if I'm wrong. They felt like disorganized and cluttered memories that have been somewhat forgotten and are now these rather simplistic, idealized thoughts welling up at the surface some time later. I'm not sure the true meaning of this poem, of course, but that was the image that I got.
In any case, this is written very well, and I am sad to say that I have nothing to critique in the way of style.
Keep writing and best wishes! xx
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