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  • Poetry » General, General Re: Ink to Paper

    Hi pretzelsing, here are some of my thoughts: Taking into account the challenge, I think you did a really nice job. Let's take a close look. Like sunlight burning at ...

    Apr 9, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Insomniac's Dream

    Hi Falconer, here are some of my thoughts on your poem: The title is intriguing, since it is a bit of a paradox. Insomniacs can't sleep, yet dreams are such ...

    Apr 7, 2015
  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical Re: Little sister, I love you

    Hi meandbooks, here are some of my thoughts on your poem: Firstly, this is a lovely little poem with a good meaning. You have the right sentiment in terms of ...

    Apr 6, 2015
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: For sale, one lifetime, poor condition.

    Hi Authorian, nice story. Here are some of my thoughts: Titles that appear in the story It's fun to put the line of a title in the story and it ...

    Mar 29, 2015
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Teen Fiction Re: Forgotten Ones #2

    Hi Deanie, I went to look at part one, but it looks like this is meant to stand alone, so I will treat it as such. Here are some of ...

    Mar 28, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, Spiritual Re: Dead Inside

    Hello FaulknerCannes, it's been a while since I've done a review here, so pardon me if I am a bit rusty. Here are some of my thoughts: Slove grasped for ...

    Mar 26, 2015
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: The Greedy and The Needy

    Hi supernb, here are some of my ideas to make this essay better: Sixteen years have passed and I’m living a life which I always wanted to live. I have ...

    Jan 2, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: The Worst Night.

    Hi housecat, here to help out! My thoughts: It was the kind of night that wraps around your mind when you’re on the subway, or trying to fall asleep. Each ...

    Apr 9, 2013
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: The Worst Night.

    Apr 9, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: I'm gay (But I cry alone at night)

    Hi Simbatheking, here are a few of my thoughts on your poem: Firstly, as a gay person, I would say that I am versed in LGBT literature and much of ...

    Apr 5, 2013
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, Horror Re: She Wears Embers like Rubies

    Hi Cole, thanks for submitting to the contest. Here are my thoughts on your entry: Green eyes. Keturah remembered. Her grandmother’s mother, Nissa, had said that the lord had eyes ...

    Apr 4, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, Fantasy Re: Alice's Conversations in Starbucks: The Mad Coffee-Party

    Hi Jash, congrats on submitting to the contest. Here are a few of my thoughts on your piece: I sat beside the window, second row to the last, the side ...

    Apr 2, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Class in the Field House Elevator

    Hi BlueAfrica, here are some of my thoughts on your poem: sitting in a glass elevator with nowhere to go Wow, what a terrific first couple lines. I am left ...

    Mar 29, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: A hundred, a hundred and ten, a hundred and one.

    Hi mattimias, here are a few of my thoughts on your poem: I see hope then, that in this world We may someday behold the stars. Despair that shadowed, misery ...

    Mar 29, 2013
  • Article / Essay » Realistic, General Re: The Conformity of Cannibalism

    Hey Tucker, interesting essay here. My thoughts: Firstly, I have to mention how overrated I thought this book was. I know many people liked it, and I don't begrudge them ...

    Feb 26, 2013


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