ToritheMonster

Well, this poem made me sad. Good job, a nice poem usually invokes emotion. You wrote this beautifully, expressing exactly how some people feel: life is hard for a teenager, ...

Hey! As a lover of haikus, I can say that this was awesome. It's often really hard to capture a pretty inamge in three short lines, but you really did. ...

Hey! Sorry, but I really have to agree with everyone else. Ticker tape just isn't for you. But you obviously have talent in there! Use it for a different style. ...

I agree with Ben. Also, you misspelled your title--you added an extra 'L'. You might want to fix your meter on the last line, and add a comma after 'watermelon'. ...

This was really cool. My only issue was your rhyming. Was it supposed to rhyme? Because it didn't, really. If it wasn't, then the beginning of your phrases need a ...

That was really pretty. It was sad and sweet at the same time, just how I like poems!Man, I usually correct people on their grammar and punctuation, but you were ...

That was really pretty. I love your rhyming, you're really good with keeping the meter straight, and it's nice to not have to correct you on that. Actually, I think ...

That was amazing! Your rhyming meter was flawless. I also loved your wording! it was really deep and meaningful. I love short poems that say a lot, and you really ...

Awesome job! I don't mean to sound like a jerk, but you reallllly captured how I feel about lots of the kids in my school. I think everyone else caught ...

Aw, that was adorable. I wish everything was all cheery like that! You have some great talent for writing poems, keep up the good work! My only nitpick is the ...

Hiya! I see what you were trying to say in this poem, but it was a tad bit confusing. If you lengthen it and reword it a little, it would ...

Cute poem! I totally understand what you mean. Sometimes it's good to be invisible. You really captured a lot in just a few words, and that's only problem was the ...

Great job! My only problem was when you said: "Alec's breath fell against her nape." you would hafta say "the nape of her neck". I love your description of her ...

I think everybody else caught your errors, so I'll just say great job! I love your characters. I really was hating Terri by the end of the story, and feeling ...

Oh my gosh. I totally want to die (you know what I mean). My name is Tori and I would love to have a knife thrown at my back in ...