TheClosetKidnapper

This is a pretty good chapter, actually. There's a few gramatical errors, like saying him instead of her, but nothing major. I especially like the conversation at the end. It ...

Hey, buttuns! I really really like this. When you post the next chapter (if this is the novel you were speaking of), I would love to know so I could ...

This is great. I love it! You should definitely continue it and tell me when you bring out the next chapter! Other than what FakeCrow said, I don't see any ...

Crystallia! Here again! Okay, so as Gingerhead said, poetic. Amazing. The only thing I could think about from an editing standpoint is to separate the dialogue from the regular text ...

Hey, vntgues91! First off let me tell you that you have great word choice in this and an overall great topic you chose to write about. My favorite line has ...

Crystallia! Here as requested :) First things first, FallenAngel is right about everything. More description would make this ten times more awesome than it already is. Secondly, you're doing a ...

I really like this, you have to let me know when the next part comes out. One thing that hasn't been said already by anyone, is the description at the ...

Great! Other than the gramatical errors Stellabeam mentioned, this is really good, Biggles! It's well written and interesting. I especially like Drake's character. :)

Hey, Up&Out here! You read my story and as a thanks I'm reading yours. It's extremely interesting and well-written, and using a dream as the opening makes it that much ...

Hey, Up&Out here! I wanna start by saying that the mention of this being written in a language you made up was really interesting to me. I've actually done that ...

I really liked this. At the beginning, it seemed a little repetitive and even a tad bit cliche, but the mention of the mercenary and then the next few paragraphs ...

Hey! Up&Out here as requested! :) First I'd like to say that this really interests me and that I would greatly appreciate it if you could inform me when the ...

You had me at chocolate. :) Seriously though, you have a very good piece here. I would definitely read more. The only thing I see from an editing viewpoint is ...

Hey, great poem here. I really like the first half best, my favorite line being the first. The only thing I see that needs to be improved is the eighth ...

This is great. The short lines do so much for the rhythm and overall feel of the poem. I also really liked how it flowed so well. Usually, you need ...