Starlight

by Prey109
  • February 16, 2012
  • Poetry
  • Poems
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Sparkling in the midnight sky,
Yet not shining though
Holding the hopes and dreams of many,
Yet they never come true
Dashing across in open view,
Yet too far to touch
You see a valley of shining objects,
Yet I see so much more
Of lands far away,
And stories not yet told
If only they came a little closer,
So we can catch what hides inside
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TheClosetKidnapper
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TheClosetKidnapper wrote a review · Fri Feb 17, 2012 1:06 am

Hey, great poem here. I really like the first half best, my favorite line being the first. The only thing I see that needs to be improved is the eighth line - the rhythm just seems off - and the last line - shouldn't "caught" be "catch"? But other than that, great job! :)



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