Tenyo

Hey Vox! I'm here to review your novel! I guess that means you're going to have to get used to me hovering around for a while. Since this is going ...

Oh dear. I'll be blunt to start; I hate the title. There's nothing wrong with throwing political correction out the window, but saying 'the crucifix is a sex toy' is ...

Hey Kat! The thing I liked most about this story is how natural it seemed. There was no big kiss or happy ever after, in fact the moment under the ...

I'm gonna be a bit harsh, sorry. I commend you for trying something new and different! A man who never made any mistakes never made anything, right? But this seems ...

Hey there Meg, welcome to yws! If you glance around through the poetry section you'll realise that this subject is a little overwritten as it is. Given that, it makes ...

A bit meloncholy at the start, but I really liked how this poem ended up. At first it sounded like the poem was about the usual teenage angst, but then ...

As a poem in general this is good, but there's one massive thing I think ruins it. The end. I will apologise. That little rant at the end kind of ...

Review part two! This chapter seems to be a contrast to chapter one. There are several characters introduced at once, and a lot of names mentioned, which makes it harder ...

Hey dude, sorry this took so long to get round to. As an opening chapter this is brilliant. I really liked the way you've introduced the wolf first. Usually a ...

Umm... I'm sorry :p I'm about to go against a lot here, and say something that's probably a little harsh. I liked the poem the way it was before (and ...

Liar! This IS something amazing! I love this poem. People need uplifting every day, and with the mass of emoness that dominates poetry, this stands out a mile. I really ...

This chapter is quite well written, but Olivia's character is off, and a few of the details. She killed a girl. She took a gun, tied her to a chair, ...

Wow. Olivia is remarkably bitter, though I guess that makes her perspective more interesting. It also has a lot more of a spark to it, which is an improvement from ...

And we finish on a brilliant chapter that I find little to critique on. As a whole, so far, this story has its flaws, but that's something you can improve ...

I like the introduction for these next two characters. Even though Asha is only aware of their voices, the way they speak and the things they say do well to ...