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Re: For a Friend and another.
This was lovely, and it was very good at conveying feeling. Criticism first methinks, and that is that I don't like the line "Apologies do not mistakes undo", because it ...
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Re: About the Author
Wow. This is brilliant, wish mine had been this good. One question; are you a time traveller? Only it isn't 2015. :-) This is, methinks, a brilliant character, and the ...
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Re: My Song
Greetings! First a small typo, in the fourth line you have written "beleif" rather than "belief". Remember the useful rule, I before E except after C, except unless it's not. ...
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Re: The Happiness of Sadness
This poem is very nice, the imagery and word choice are probably your best strength, although the rhyming is a close second; I can't find any forced rhymes. However I ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Memory. (now in stanzas)
Beautiful. The stanzas work well rhythmicly, and also the pacing of the piece had no glitches that I could see. The suggestion for improvment I will give is that "Then ...
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Re: A Spinster-To-Be
Hello again! Go blue! This was really nice, and I am certain that it is an original subject matter! :-) The thing that I really liked about this was the ...
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Re: Have An Ice Day
This was a beautiful poem, and I think what I liked the most about it was the unique attitude that it had, simply marvelous. My favorite bit of imagery was ...
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Re: A cul de sac
This poem's main strength is it's rhythm. It has a sort of nightmarish quality in the pitter-patter sounds, which I bbelieve is due in part to the effective short sentences. ...
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Re: About something
So, your first poem? Wow. This was brilliant. If there was any deep meaning other than the face value story, I am afraid I missed it, but it was great ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Willow Tree
Greetings on this fine review day! This poem has a fine constant rhythm and general structure, due methinks in part to the rhyming, which was not forced anywhere. My single ...
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Re: Just Smile
There is only one word to describe this, and that is SPLENDIFEROUS! This is such a cheerful optimistic poem that it made me smile! :-) It is so true as ...
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Re: Inspire Me
This is very easy to relate to! :-) O.k. first my favorite bit. This was undoubtedly the last two lines, because the idea of putting ideas hidden under a blank ...
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Re: Lost in a Story
Hello this fine review day! Good point no. 1: Huzzah! You rhymed! I always like it when poets take the trouble to rhyme, it greatly increases the sense of rhythm ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Hairball
I sense this to be a truly heartfelt message, and I am thankful I have a dog. Righty-ho, criticism first. This time, it is writing it in bold. There are ...
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Re: Thank God for Today
Hello again! A nice happy poem! :-) I will give you my criticism, while I still remember it. And that is punctuation. It is clear you are using it, but ...
Feb 23, 2014
