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  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Romantic Re: For a Friend and another.

    This was lovely, and it was very good at conveying feeling. Criticism first methinks, and that is that I don't like the line "Apologies do not mistakes undo", because it ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Other » Narrative, General Re: About the Author

    Wow. This is brilliant, wish mine had been this good. One question; are you a time traveller? Only it isn't 2015. :-) This is, methinks, a brilliant character, and the ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: My Song

    Greetings! First a small typo, in the fourth line you have written "beleif" rather than "belief". Remember the useful rule, I before E except after C, except unless it's not. ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Happiness of Sadness

    This poem is very nice, the imagery and word choice are probably your best strength, although the rhyming is a close second; I can't find any forced rhymes. However I ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Memory. (now in stanzas)

    Beautiful. The stanzas work well rhythmicly, and also the pacing of the piece had no glitches that I could see. The suggestion for improvment I will give is that "Then ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A Spinster-To-Be

    Hello again! Go blue! This was really nice, and I am certain that it is an original subject matter! :-) The thing that I really liked about this was the ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Have An Ice Day

    This was a beautiful poem, and I think what I liked the most about it was the unique attitude that it had, simply marvelous. My favorite bit of imagery was ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A cul de sac

    This poem's main strength is it's rhythm. It has a sort of nightmarish quality in the pitter-patter sounds, which I bbelieve is due in part to the effective short sentences. ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: About something

    So, your first poem? Wow. This was brilliant. If there was any deep meaning other than the face value story, I am afraid I missed it, but it was great ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Other Re: The Willow Tree

    Greetings on this fine review day! This poem has a fine constant rhythm and general structure, due methinks in part to the rhyming, which was not forced anywhere. My single ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Just Smile

    There is only one word to describe this, and that is SPLENDIFEROUS! This is such a cheerful optimistic poem that it made me smile! :-) It is so true as ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Inspire Me

    This is very easy to relate to! :-) O.k. first my favorite bit. This was undoubtedly the last two lines, because the idea of putting ideas hidden under a blank ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Fantasy, General Re: Lost in a Story

    Hello this fine review day! Good point no. 1: Huzzah! You rhymed! I always like it when poets take the trouble to rhyme, it greatly increases the sense of rhythm ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Hairball

    I sense this to be a truly heartfelt message, and I am thankful I have a dog. Righty-ho, criticism first. This time, it is writing it in bold. There are ...

    Feb 23, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Lyrical Re: Thank God for Today

    Hello again! A nice happy poem! :-) I will give you my criticism, while I still remember it. And that is punctuation. It is clear you are using it, but ...

    Feb 23, 2014


When people are free to do as they please, they usually imitate each other.
— Eric Hoffer