TakeThatYouFiend

Good day there Reise, the Fiend here to throw in my two cents. Unlike dogsrule below me, I don't think you need to even out your stanzas as that would ...

Greetings TriSARAHtops, it's review time! In this review I will offer lots of criticism, but please don't think I'm being harsh, I just analyse in a lot of detail. Firstly, ...

What you have done here is good, but I have a couple of suggestions if you will hear me out. Firstly, I think that this shouldn't entirely be in italics. ...

Greetings! This is a mighty fine work you have, however I have a number of nitpicks that methinks need addressing, so, if I may, I'll take this piece line by ...

Yes! "The funeral home was completely dead." BEST. OPENING LINE. EVER! Just reading the first line, I thought you might want to mention (knowing Terrance's character) that the tiny paper ...

In the words of Benedict in Much Ado About Nothing, "There's a double meaning it that." I have one little nitpick in order to preserve the double meaning. that is ...

This is a really good piece and idea but a couple of points have really let you down. Firstly, you are very low on imagery. I have two aids for ...

Hello there new rival! Although I am always glad to see more reviewing, I MUST WIN!!! The main thing that I think is lacking here is the lack of punctuation ...

Just one question, "HOW DO YOU KNOW MY DOG???" This, poemet, really captures that doggie essence. I think it could be longer, and I shall give tips for making it ...

This would be kinda creepy if I hadn't been reminded of "Don't go out tonight,// It's bound to take your life,// There's a bad moon on the rise." The entire ...

Hello again! This was very good, personally I am a big fan of fantasy, so this immediately give you one massive piece of advice (which will be most of this ...

Greetings nemesis. I shall review, and I must beat you. *evil glare* My first point is that "millions" isn't clear. Millions of dollers would be more precise and make easier ...

Believe it or not, I have in fact listened to a radio play about time traveling trousers (way better alliteration in English,) called professor prune and the time trousers, but ...

Ok hello there from diene Lieblingsmoomin! So I will probably be hypercritical for these, so just remember to take only the suggestions you like the sound of, and ignore the ...

Hallo there rival! You may win the day, but by gad I'm going for no. 1 personal point count! The first problem that is evident with this work is that ...