Swires

Skell - Age of Five book 3 hasnt been pubished. I love Trudi Canavan though, I have read all the Black Magician Series, Priestess of the White and I'm now ...

I read this all the way through and it was interesting, vibrant and unique like all your short stories. One thing I would change is the title because the statue ...

bob addressed pretty much every issue that any poet has ever had in the history of yws, but i have to say that when i read this, i thought it ...

A weapon, like no other, has been formed from my soul. The last line here seems cluttered. It may be better as -formed from my soul It speaks of who ...

As soon as I saw those present tense verbs I came to the reply box. Ill do the old bookshop test. GO into a book show with 2 baskets - ...

Ok, the first major problem is the beginning, you write a blabbery useless introduction. Go straight into the main characters actions. Then the second major problem: Girl who is depressed ...

Mmm.. Im going to be the devils advocate - I didnt like it. To me the second verse did not make sense at all. I don't understand why Pathetic Fallacy ...

inspiration marinates this land in a thin glaze of honey wine and the nectar of old gods; across the fresh Aegean blue, heroes from the distant past are calling, thrumming ...

You go through life easily, As gracefully as a swan, Never doubting in good fortune, Which never ceases to come With the grace of a swan -- sounds better as ...

Your first effort was a good try. Try using some rhyming words.Try to put some rythme into ur makes ur poem sound good. I liked the way the poem ended. ...

" Thank you very much for taking your time and reading this. I'm open to suggestions, but please have mercy with the critics" - Why? How on earth can you ...

Im hooked like a fish out of water. I found this a fresh read from my dwellings in the fantasy well, I rarely explore the Other forum but when I ...

I found the style simple and easy to follow. However you say "Steven" far to many times, we know who the scene is about so "He" will do just fine. ...

I like the basic idea of what you're doing here and parts of it are very well written, but there are some things I would change. You basically run through ...

Im not going to add salt to the wound by reiterating what the others have said although I agree with it. I would recommend buying a poetry anthology or book ...