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Hallo! Sushi here roarin' to review ;D I must say that your plot it very interesting and the cliffhangers are well written. Your descriptions are also shown very nicely in ...

Heya! Sushi here to do another review:D She was completely exhausted at that time and hence it was not hard for her to fall asleep soon in the warmth and ...

Hey! Sushi here roarin' to review. to zoom into the meteors. You can't really zoom "into" a meteor, so maybe "onto the meteor" would be better phrased. They were breath ...

Hello, Sushi here! I liked how in the beginning you made Jason's parents' death seem like an afterthought, like Jason was reluctant to even mention it. The way you wrote ...

Hey rashabh! Here to review :) I am your nil boy mamma. Just pointing out a something that was a little confusing. Perhaps you meant to say "l'il" instead of ...

Mehta heard a loud scream tackle at his eardrums.He stood up in one quick motion, the chair screeched back. Okay, in the first sentence I don't think that the word ...

Mary was sitting in front of the idiot box as she was a couch potato . As you can probably see the period here was messed up which is only ...

She seemed more relaxed than her husband, almost lying in the chair. She was also nicely dressed. She wore a beautiful red dress that reflected the light from the candle, ...

It was like a secret guessing game that we never talked about. I absolutely loved this line here using a simile to bring your youthful way of looking at things ...

Sometimes she would even make breakfast for Isabel and I. I think that the "I" is supposed to be a me since it's at the end of a sentence. A ...

as if the clouds had not yet decided on whether they would rain. When I read this sentence I feel as if it wasn't completely finished yet. What was the ...

I really liked this because it was all about just one thing, one person. The only thing that bothered me was the rhythm, I didn't know how I should read ...

Wow, I totally saw everything that this poem described. The fact that you used so little words and could create vivid images in one's head is a good skill. I ...

I see what you did there at the end. Like how old people always say they miss being young or something, that was pretty neat to do that. Some of ...

The dark- haired boy had faired fairly well, Having two words that sound alike next to each other kind of stops the reader's flow. I love how this is from ...