SushiSashimi333

Sushi here as promised! I like how you started this with the present going back to the past, which is ironic considering your story title. Your writing style is interesting ...

I really liked how you made the title of the poem seem so casual and made it to be about something so serious. I allows the meaning to have a ...

This was a very interesting piece with a very nice message. I like the way that you conveyed it at the end there. The only thing that bothered me was ...

Hello, Sushi here ready to review! -thumbs up- What do you think you are doing out at this time of night or morning should I say? Don't you know you ...

Sushi here! Hey, I was just thinking, what a wonderful poem this is! I like the way it's written, the strong meaning from the person saying it, and the repetition ...

Sushi is here to share her thoughts! I liked the fact that you were able to get across your feelings of confusion and regret in this piece. It’s a mistake ...

Hey Tilgen! Sushi here. “Take, torture, and kill.” Douglas thought to himself. Thoughts are italicized, just a hint for the future. The words repeated in his head psychologically over and ...

Hello, Sushi here. Okay, so first with a good point. I liked how you ended each of your stanzas with "Sad Thing" and the last one with "Oh, Sad Thing". ...

Sushi here! I have dreams about him sometimes but I still cannot see what he looks like but I hear his voice whispering to me and then I wake up ...

Hallo! Sushi here. Imperial Institute of technology Not really sure how important this is to you, just thought you might like to know that you forgot to capitalize "technology". I ...

"How do I believe that you're God ?", asked Mary. The comma at the end of the quote should not be there. You already ended the quote so no need ...

Okay, Sushi is back for her review part two! Two of the four men started taking off their pants."Ey ay no no what're you going to do with my angel?" ...

Sushi here! Your prologue is written differently from what I am used to. Normally authors try to make their character descriptions more subtle, but you just used your prologue to ...

Sushi here! Somehow, the expectant daylight makes me feel safe from whatever is hiding in the dark depths of the forest even though I still can't shake the feeling that ...

Hello! Sushi here thinking that I should check out your Elemental story, I assume this is it :D. Heart hammering in my chest and my breath coming in short gasps ...