Sujana

Curious thing, isn't it? It seemed to me that there wasn't much this work was aiming for. After finishing Stephen King's short story Mile 81 (from the Bazaar of Bad ...

I sort of ignored this when it first came out, but I decided to revisit it to see what was happening. And while it wasn't entirely impressive, it did show ...

For an excerpt, this was actually pretty good. There were some parts that felt like you were more telling than showing, but for the most part you kept it short ...

Interesting. Very, very interesting. Since this is a flash fiction piece, I can't expect much to review from, but you've given me enough to contemplate over. I don't think there's ...

Oooh. A villain protagonist! This'll be a lovely read. While your presentation was overall splendid, I felt like you could've used a second or third round in the editting machine. ...

I do agree with Tigeraye for the most part. I really liked this story, but specific examples will be for the main praises. However, I will say that it showcased ...

I will say that I have not played your game as well, however, I can still criticize based off of storytelling. And honestly? You need a lot more storytelling. Introduction ...

Good story, bad execution. I always say that regarding most works like this, but I genuinely mean it this time. The development of the story was well done, you did ...

Quite interesting. Strangely interesting. Not a lot to dissect here, so unfortunately this won't be one of my famous eight thousand character reviews (or who knows, maybe it will be--I ...

Okay. Okay. That was pretty damn funny. If you don't recognize me, I've been a bit of a fan in the past--I think I once said that you might not ...

I'm tryna put you in the worst mood, ah P1 cleaner than your church shoes, ah Milli point two just to hurt you, ah All Red Lambs, just to tease ...

A Note For The Second Reviewer (and to Some Extent the Author): This work requires proofreading. Not a lot, but just enough for the work to suffer because of it. ...

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It's a good thing dear SilverBerry did the spellchecking for you, because I'm not entirely interested in that at the moment. However, I'll gladly talk my mouth off about plot ...

So since dear Marmalade helped you with the proofreading bit of your review, I think it's only fair that you hear a bit from the structure and story bits. Which ...