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Re: The Memory
The poem itself is sound. But the topic your covering is ground already covered by so many people. You might want to find a unique way of doing it. Otherwise ...
Feb 7, 2016 -
Re: There Are Holes in Her Eyes
Your second stanza is a bit rough. Otherwise the poem is ok. There's a little flow work needed.
Feb 7, 2016 -
Re: I can't see through this blindfold god help me
um. Sure. Technically the poem is good. I just don't know what to make of it :\
Feb 7, 2016 -
Re: I am Water
I like it. Great rhyme scheme
Feb 7, 2016 -
Re: I am Water
I like it. Great rhyme scheme
Feb 7, 2016 -
Re: The Boy Who hated Lefties
Generic but good rhyme scheme
Feb 7, 2016 -
Re: It's My Fault
Yowch. A bit blocky. Lots of emotion which is good. Try finding a rhyme scheme though. Good job.
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: The Runner in the Sun
Thankee
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: The Runner in the Sun
Thanks o7
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: In Memory
Words cannot express the sorrow of reading this.
Jan 23, 2016 -
Re: the cosmos
Um. Don't really understand it. The words are beautiful and fit like gloves but um... Taste thing. I don't really like abstract poems. This comment should NOT effect your writing ...
Jan 22, 2016 -
Re: such beautiful flowers
Nice. Cut the last sentence. Love the flow. Just as a suggestion, if you can find a way to incorporate more meaning into it the please do so but if ...
Jan 21, 2016 -
Re: The Man I Loved
Great job. Awesome flow. I love the ending. I have no way to improve upon this.
Jan 20, 2016 -
Re: When the Balcony Collapses
I like it. First verse can use some flow work
Jan 19, 2016 -
Re: Little Glass Girl
Hard to say. To each their own. You could make your sentences longer (not by adding words) or just say things as they come. Make sure the reader can understand ...
Jan 19, 2016