StoryWeaver13

What was your message in the poem. What were you trying to say? Freedom is only for the Fighting? That it's not? That the people who fight aren't the ones ...

Haha, this is hilarious. :lol: *liked

When you have a poem (especially one so short) you really have to make each line count. I think you could've found a way to make this bolder, more emotional ...

You pointed out what's probably the main problem in this piece--I run off with my imagination yet again and leave others void of understanding! Sorry, I'm only going on about ...

Thanks for the review Snoink (haha that username always makes me a good way :P ). And I take the Shel Silverstein thing as an extreme compliment, by the way...he ...

Cute poem, I really liked it. No real big things to nit-pick about, so overall it's a fun and enjoyable little poem. :smt001

Thanks for the input guys (I'll return the favor :smt001 ). @ borntobeawriter Beautifully said. BUT you say the writing is familiar, yet when I read further on, she had ...

Ooh, creepy...but in a good way. :wink: I think the person above me pretty much covered the critiques, so overall, cool poem and really dramatic.

Interesting poem and really dramatic, but I think it should be cut a little shorter. To me, it started out a bold poem, but the further it went on the ...

Haha, this was awesome, thanks for the laugh! :lol:

Oops, thanks on that Attolia, I didn't catch that! Haha, you might have noticed my Spanish isn't exactly brilliant...I meant to mess up on Jamie's but I didn't catch the ...

Like I said about the first chapter, you've sparked my curiosity. Keep writing. ;)

Good beginning, I'd keep it up and build from it. You've already grabbed my attention. :)

Yeah, like callmeLily73 said, very unique. Good writing, something...honest?...about it. I don't know. Either way, it was well-written. :)

Great poem, good use of words and really original. :)