Published April 1, 2010
Something cute 
Dear Book,
Please forgive me book, for the terrible things i have done
From reading your internal organs,
To drawing on you for fun
For throwing you on the floor
And scratching your front cover
Dog tagging your ribs
And forgetting you over summer
I'm sorry, please forgive me
I'll try not to anymore
But if you don't forgive me
More torture you'll endure...
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Hello, I'm LastPaladin and I'll be your reviewer. This is cute, but I'm afraid with me cute doesn't cut it. The line lengths switch about too much for one thing lets explore this.
(Perfect ending)Overall it's pretty good just some general nitpicking. Hope this helped.
Hi Night! I really like this. It's very lighthearted and different, something I don't see too often.
Only a few insignificant nitpicks:
Lowercase "i" and also, you say "book" twice, and very close to each other. It's somewhat redundant. Try eliminating the second "book" somehow.
The first line here needs an extra syllable or two. Try something like "sir" or "dear" at the end... Those are crappy suggestions, but it's the best I could come up with.
Overall, this was awesome. Thanks for posting it. If you have any questions or would like another review, please feel free to ask me!
-Knightley
Cute poem, I really liked it. No real big things to nit-pick about, so overall it's a fun and enjoyable little poem.