Published February 14, 2010
once open a time in unreal world workaday,
a boy born with wreak smile on face that day.
the time changed his position with unstoppable way
childhood came and discrimination began in swift
age of love came and lust of knowledge both fight
then the time came boy become restless, heartless and ill
unreal world made him cry and cry in endless will
he started a game of life and death with them
all died but boy never got his will
he just murmured all years till death
i played a game, which never ended
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Yeah, like callmeLily73 said, very unique. Good writing, something...honest?...about it. I don't know. Either way, it was well-written.
I love your writing! It has lots of creativity and individuality and I really love how you express your self in it. Keep on writing!
