StoryWeaver13

Nitpicks - a little too fast-paced (I know, you don't want insanely long chapters that nobody bothers reading - but if you have to, break them up into sections) and ...

Really good, really dramatic and I want to read more. I only have one *tiny* word of advice - When I entered my house, it was completely dark. Maybe he ...

People write about this topic a lot, and honestly it can get overly-emotional and sappy. Yours didn't, and instead it was honest and pure. Personally, I also liked to hear ...

Wow. I really love this. Will you message me when you finish the next chapter? Anyway, you so far seem to have a good plot and a wicked use of ...

Awww such sad poetry from everyone today. :'( But this told a really meaningful story, and I can't say anything more than that really. I think you could've done a ...

I have no name I am but a ghost For no one see's me No apostrophe needed in sees. Even as I lie here Among the crowds . I see ...

Is this based off of that news piece about the girl who committed suicide after being bullied? Because I heard that this morning and it was one of the saddest ...

He trudged through the snow, slowed by the heaviness of the falling ice. The cold fallen snow was speckled with brown from dirt of the passing public. As he walk ...

I was gonna get what I wanted I had an impeccable plan Everything was going so perfectly Then along came this man Already not a fan of the rhyme scheme... ...

1st poem: It was nice, but I wasn't too keen on the voice. You try to catch the images of childhood but you talk so mature and old-fashioned that it ...

I really like this. I think the last reviewer did a good job, so my only suggestion would be to maybe even add a little more detail about his family, ...

So like the first reviewer said, the beginning's confusing but then it's cleared up, but I actually like that. I remember reading another poem of yours and I guess I'm ...

I'm not sure I got the whole message of the poem...I mean, I just didn't get what you were trying to say here. It seemed just kind of like random ...

I actually disagree with the first reviewer just a little bit, I got the whole feeling of unsureness and naivity through the whole thing, and it was really relateable to ...

OK, first things first, you could work on the grammar a bit. That's not a huge deal. My bigger problem is the voice of the whole thing. It just felt ...