StoryWeaver13

Ooh, this gave me honest shivers! The way you portrayed Macey, through the way she viewed things and the characteristics of her room, was really good. It made me sympathize ...

It was sort of systematic how she climbed over the railings. She had done it so many times before that she no longer even considered the drop down if she ...

I see the man, or perhaps sense him, as he enters my home, shovel straddled upon his wide shoulders, torch brandished before him. One cannot see the stars from my ...

Wow, this was classic. *applause* I can't take this seriously enough for a real, honest review...but classic. My favorite lines - Now this poem is a work of art because ...

As a starting poem, this really isn't horrible. But it could still use a lot of work. ;) My conscience is a swirl, I get kind of a mental image ...

You have a really good way of making the images vivid, and the overall tone really brings this together well. Plot-wise this was interesting too, but I felt like I ...

This was really cool, I'll definitely be looking out for your next chapters. I think plot-wise this is really good, but why do you use apostrophes instead of quotation marks? ...

Yeah, I agree about the 'creepy' aspect, but this is still a really good poem. The prompt's actually part of what makes it so interesting; it's not something that people ...

Yes, a little disturbed. Haha, no, this is actual pretty entertaining to read in its own morbid little way. It has a lot of dialogue and lack of detail, which ...

This was pretty good, the only thing is that I really didn't get much of a message so much as an observation. It isn't needed to have some kind of ...

I think what really makes this poem work is how well it reads aloud, and it just rolls perfectly off of your tongue. You use really good alliteration and rhythm, ...

Haha, this is awesome on such a nerdy level. Anyway, I was reading it trying to figure out what was talking, hadn't figured out it was a protractor until the ...

Well, a little out of season but who doesn't like a Christmas in February? But I really can relate; ever since my family moved, I just haven't felt that "magic." ...

This needs to be added to! Even though this is pretty powerful for only three lines, it's just not enough to stand on its own. It leaves too many ifs ...

This was a cool idea, even though I honestly don't know who you're talking about (I'm a bad guesser, I guess, haha). Anyway, I like your descriptions of imperfection, and ...