Published February 18, 2011
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wow this is a neat poem. It is very descriptive yet very mysterious. Is he old is he young? or is he old but is stuck at the same age? a tad bit confused there but all in all this is a nice poem.
good job
This was a cool idea, even though I honestly don't know who you're talking about (I'm a bad guesser, I guess, haha). Anyway, I like your descriptions of imperfection, and that you were able to artistically describe your love for a fictional character. When most people do this, it ends up being completely corny. You manage to avoid it, and your poem has a cool, quirky character to it. I think if you'd really wanted to you could have gone even further into imagery, but it's fine as-is. Alas, I've been at a loss on what to critique today.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver