Stori

Bonjour, dogs! (I just had to.) I believe I've found a small mistake. Jacque straightened his white coat with his white gloves and started the long trek to the door. ...

That's what you get for watching West Side Story I guess- an inaccurate portrayal of gang life. In other words, it's time for Stori to do some homework.

Thanks, Charlie. This scene is actually based on H'yarr's experience during the game's opening sequence, so that's part of the trouble. (Maybe I ought to work in some more of ...

Hello, Sanskar. I'm not sure I would classify this as humor, as nothing about it makes me feel like laughing. Be that as it may, it *could* be a scathing ...

Sol, you have a gift for verse. I don't see any grammatical errors, either. :)

I must say, Sol, the style you've written this in reminds me of The Message Bible. That's a good thing.

I personally dont live in North America and TOTALLY agree that growing up in America seems quite empty. Yo! I personally don't live in Canada, but the US is not ...

Nice work so far, Vyper. I just wanted to say one thing- you should write something about when Timothy learned Susan's name.

Truthfully, I could use some help. I know that the 'strangers' are Spirit's parents. That somehow Youth is going to be paralyzed- but that's about it.

If I could sum this piece up in a word, it would be 'beautiful'.

Nobody said poems had to rhyme perfectly.

I like this piece. It's sad and mysterious, and I love the imagery. There really isn't anything I can find to review.

Your sentences must not stretch out - that is, they must not be overdone. That's what's called a run-on sentence. This article[/url] explains how you can fix them.

I have to disagree with Zeph- the short lines are what make this poem remarkable.

For a second, reading the preview, I thought this was a Shadow Children piece. That being said, it's a good take on the Hunger Games. Although I wonder if someone ...