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Lovely! I don't have much of "night life" in my town, just frogs and cats. Anyway, thanks. You know, I once saw four otters.

It's too long! Break up the dialog. Keep the flow going.

What's that? Male alternative yuck! I meant this as an expression, not a real song, so 'pologies. Thanks for the critique.

Yeah! The use of rhyme, meter and synonym were superb. By synonym I specifically want to point out the last line: "So distant, so far." That's poetry!

Could you explain the musical terms? I don't know that much :cry: Anyway, a great poem. Keep at it.

I'm no nit-picker, but the name should be "Aries." And I think this should be prose, not poetry. Of course you can disagree.

A bit wordy, I think. Maybe you could break it up into two posts. The description is great, especially the "other world." Character description is also good. All in all, ...

Thanks. The story, I guess is sometime during A New Hope. It's a bit difficult since it's turning out to be and "alternate universe." The characters are all there: Han, ...

Tolkien rhyming: egads! I never heard such a thing, except for Tom Bombadil. He's one of my favorite characters. Anywho, it's a great poem.

Who's speaking Latin? Anyway, great job. I like it. Maybe you could add another verse?

Ooh, I love it! The idea is great. And it reminds me of "Crystal Chronicles." That's a great game, IMHO. Thanks for this!

I like how you used "cause." The lines go well together actually. It's all a seamless piece, but again you should extend it.

Great!! I like the imagery. For instance, "typing away at her laptop, chomping on bear's claws. The one problem, and a big one, is that I can't relate. I didn't ...

I agree, the imagery is great. Flying through space was a nice touch.

Cool! Is it based on a real story? I want to read it!!