Hey there Clau!
I love the imagery behind 'crinkled pages,' there's so much that can be deciphered from just those two words. The rest of the first line is good too; a nice introduction and already very interesting.
The second line works well and I love the whole holocaust theme you have going (Still got your head stuck on your NaNoWriMo?) and the dash was a good choice of punctuation.
The third line though needs some revision. There's something that's not quite right. I think that realization and frightening have too many syllables to roll smoothly off of the tongue like the other words seem to. Perhaps you could change frightening to something like alarming or daunting or something. I'm sure your vocabulary list stretches further than my own. As for realization, I have very few suggestions. I mean, it's hard to change it without changing the meaning behind your poem but perhaps knowledge, truth or reality would work?
Overall, it's short but you're right, that adds to the impact and I can only guess at where the title comes in. I do have a few hunches I suppose but why not give me an explanation so that I don't embarrass myself with some completely lurid, out there connections that my imagination has thought up.
Anyway, I shall leave my comments in your capable hands and I hope I've helped a little.
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