StoneHeart

Okay, your style has recovered and is back on track, though it doesn't quite have the funny touch that your latest chapter has. This is starting to make me think ...

Black here for a review. :) First off > Okay, sorry, but this is sadly incomplete. Your link in the beginning doesn't work and you're missing a " in there ...

Okay, this was good, not as good as the latest chapter, but it was still enjoyable. I really can tell how much you've improved from here too your last chapter. ...

BlackNether here for a review. :) Okay, your grammar was exquisite. You had a couple of spots where it looks like you hit enter without meaning too and ended up ...

Okay, I'm really feeling it that I haven't read the rest of this . . . But it was amazing, really, your style is perfect. Fairly decent grammar, mixed with ...

Nice work, so he's gonna be like a gladiator of some sort. Usually I tell people that they need more detail, but seeing as this is the third chapter I'm ...

This chapter feels like it's cut off . . . maybe that's just me, maybe it's just that I've never really been to a school before. But it doesn't feel ...

Okay, I have not heard of this discovery yet. Why did you post in on here? If I may ask. Pointless, however, you can post anything you want too, and ...

Okay, first off, this was great. But that doesn't mean it doesn't have problems, and though I doubt this review will do a thing compared with Rydia, I hope it ...

Ah, okay, this was in the wrong place I think. Usually you'd put this kind of thing in the StoryBooks, okay, otherwise it will probably be removed. Just a note. ...

Wow, this describes so many people so perfectly. Each of her 'skins' is the ideal person for each position/place in life. Yet . . . none are the real thing. ...

Okay, I really feel for Danny, I see him as a kid. It isn't easy to write a story and make it seem like the kid in the story really ...

Okay, I really should probably have read the first part before going to this, but hey, I'm going to review anyway. All right, your grammar: It's pretty much perfect, I ...

Ohkay, a mythical world. Nice. Your style is . . . very strange, I liked how you started the story, with that kind of P.O.V, it was impressive, and a ...

It's probably a good thing that I have never read any Sherlock Holmes books . . . Your grammar is really pretty good, minus a couple of points. Is that ...