SteppeVesteffi

Hello, This is a really trippy story you've got here. As Lauren said, it's very surreal—the way it slides from one event to the next haphazardly, without any rhyme or ...

Hello, This is terrific! (Also: Your username is amazing.) You seem quite adept at philosophical writing—not to generalize, but so many young writers, when trying to write something "deep" or ...

Hello, This may be the best story I've read on YWS. THAT LAST LINE. The suspense. The drama. The characters—we only know them for a short time, but they're fascinating ...

Hello, So, first, a little about me (and yes, I know 'a little about me' is a horrible way to begin a review, but I think it's justified in this ...

Hello, First of all: Your avatar makes me happy. Secondly, this is fantastic. You get high marks on pretty much everything I look for in a story. The imagery: great. ...

Hello, Okay. This is going to be lengthy and rough. Bear with me. First, some positives. The world you set up here seems like it has the potential to be ...

Hello, Dear God. This is good. Like, spectacularly good. So many things I liked—where to begin? Imagery. Let's start there. Your imagery is captivating (well, really, this whole piece is ...

Hello, Here I am, ready to deliver my promised review! So this chapter was delightful—better than the first. You're making excellent strides. I'm so happy to see you heeded a ...

Hello, This is a phenomenal story! (And no, I don't think it's cheesy at all. ) You perfectly captured the wan and desperate voice of this character. Cruz feels like ...

Hello, This is quite a piece you've got here! Your voice is fantastic. Absolutely fantastic. And, since a strong voice is one of the most difficult things to cultivate, that's ...

Hello, I liked this. This is the type of story that can go either way, but I thought you (mostly) pulled it off. I enjoyed the way it was written—the ...

Hello, Gotta say, I feel a bit conflicted about this one. Parts of it were really quite good; others, less so. First, I'll start with the positives. I like the ...

Hello, Full disclosure: I have not read the original first chapter or the subsequent ones. It didn't sound, based on your description, like I needed to, so I figured I ...

Hello, Wow! This is exceptionally good. Fantastic, even. So many things to like about it—I'm not entirely sure where to begin. I guess I'll start with your imagery, because I'm ...

Hello, Wow. Lots to say about this one. First, the positives: You've got a very intriguing world set up here. I like it; it's curious. The characters are also interesting, ...