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Have to go so I'll make it quick. It is good. You might be using some words alot for excample:trees There are a few words that need changing and needs ...

Ok...Really...disturbing...*looking around for something* Is this poem for...um...someone you hate?*keeps his lightsaber close* Overall it is good...buy disturbing.*moving slowely back* Poor woman.*St

Okay, to tell you the truth, it was too short. I dint know whar you were trying to do but okay. The beginning, everything was destroyd. Where's the romance in ...

I loved this it was great. Very nice flow and great timing. I can image the pace and beat. Well done.

It is good, just a bit short. Not much to say, Sorry. Really nice.

Sorry, I meant it is a good story.

Real good beginning. It really is a weird story, but it is good. "Well if you would like to we have a job for you" You need to put a ...

Really good. Don't post the entire thing. Just break it up in parts. Overall, very good.

This was a small script, and not much happesned. You were running through the story, you could've added more detail. Make it a bit longer.

About that, English isn't my home language so...

This is totally different than other. You took a brave step and was congratulated for this. Very good. Really new and creative Well done

Ha ha. Very funny. Didnt expect a pie. Very good imagery. Cant find anything wrong. Good

Not bad. I think you can make record or something. I already have my own beat in my head.(I write songs for our band.) Just here and there that doen't ...

You write good. The fourth paragraph I think, you use the word 'wolf' too many times. Not bad though. It can become a nice book.

It is not bad. You should describe your charachters a bit more. I didn't read the entire thing,too busy(sorry) Can't find anything wrong in the parts I read. Really nice.