It was dark. Looking around, everything was rubble. The entire place lay in ruins, buildings had crumbled. Walls were completely destroyed, and the water beds dried out. The plants, brown and dead, or dying. As he walked to the center of the area, he found a small square with a pedestal in the very center. Maybe where a statue was once placed. However the statue was, like everything else, broken. The once the perfect image of a person, but only those who knew would ever be able to tell who the statue was meant to be.
Curled up at the foot of the statue was a small figure, a boy, more a young man. Sobbing inconsolably, repeatedly asking a question, that could never be satisfyingly answered "Why..?"
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Hello!
RandomTalks here with a short review!
I am not quite sure where you wanted to go with this. This is a very short piece, too short to actually count as a story. It feels more like an excerpt from something larger, or perhaps a piece of poetry reflecting the destructive nature of mankind. I don't think this really qualifies as 'romance' as well, that is, unless you want to romanticize war and its consequences.
Nice piece of description here, but unfortunately we do not have the backstory to support it. Firstly, we know nothing about this world. We don't know what has happened here or why it is lying in rubbles. I personally think that this is the picture of a place left destroyed after something terrible that happened. The question posed at the end by the little boy makes me feel as if this has something to do with the insatiable urge of man to control man. Maybe, this is a war-worn place, and everything is in shambles because it is over now but there is no victory party remaining to enjoy the destruction.
The statue perhaps represents the city that was once tall and mighty and all bright and shiny as well. However, it no longer stands, broken perhaps by its own vanity, just like the place that engaged itself in whatever that led to this path of destruction. However, all of this is just what I got from the subtext. I don't have enough information to actually make educated guesses about what happened or what is happening.
We do not even know who the little boy is or why he is alone in the middle of this mess. Maybe he is supposed to represent the innocent who get caught in the middle of the savage world of the adults. They live with the consequences that they never asked for and maybe that is the significance of the question posed at the end. Children cannot understand why adults engage in this.
Overall, this was a good piece of writing. Unfortunately, we do not have enough information to understand what it was supposed to be.
Keep writing and have a great day!
I enjoyed it. I don't see what it has to do with romantic fiction but i thought it was prety cool. I would have posted it in Poetry...
Okay, to tell you the truth, it was too short.
I dint know whar you were trying to do but okay.
The beginning, everything was destroyd. Where's the romance in this?
I wasn't really happy about this, sorry.
This was pretty short. Not sure exactly what you wanted to do with this, but I think it has potential. could use a tad more description, and some lengthening. As it is, there isn't much of a plotline. Make something else happen!
I liked it. Could use some work, but could be very interesting.........
P.S. Love the siggy