Published September 15, 2007
On a cloud of disbelief,
I'm slowly passing by.
Floating on without a care,
life's easy to deny.
I'm dreaming of the sweetest things
that I have ever known,
then you throw me reality
and sink me like a stone.
[CHORUS]
The truth is a disaster
that sends me falling faster
into the earth,
I'm tumbling down
right through the atmosphere.
The pressure here is growing-
There's nothing worse than knowing
reality
has lied to me,
and lies I held so dear.
[/CHORUS]
The bittersweet simplicity
of life in black and white
makes no attempts at clarity
as I put up this fight.
I never knew the concepts of
such anger, mass demise.
I never thought about the war.
All I believed was lies.
[CHORUS]
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Wow, nice lyrics. The title clearly fits it. I especially love the chorus. Anyway great job.
the only part i didn't like was the second to last line. "I never thought about the war." just because it makes it sound suddenly political and i don't like songs about politics. but maybe you didn't mean it like that. maybe you just meant the war as in life in general.
other than that, this was a beautiful song and i am amazed at how young you are, because it is so good. awesome awesome job. keep it up.
I absolutely love this! I could almost here music in the background as I read, and I could see somebody singing this.
It was a little short, but I really like it the way it is. I started wishing that it was a real song by the end.
Lee-chan
Ok wait.
When did you post this and why didn't you tell me it was so good?!
Qui dear, I really love this. You are so good at this stuff.
I'm speachless because I'm in awe. lol
Good Job. *hugs*
Lots O' Luv,
Lindsay
WOW!! I am truly impressed. I'm quite new here, but I've already seen quite an amount of lyrics and this is absolutely the best one!! I mght post one of my own lyrics here in the next few days and I'd be really grateful to know what you think.
Wow, you are gifted!!
Write more!!!
I loved this it was great.
Very nice flow and great timing.
I can image the pace and beat.
Well done.
WOW! I love this.
Something about the last stanza isn't working though...
Anyhow, is this about how Bush lied to us about the war??? Or is it completely off-topic?
From what I know of songs, this was kind of short. It didn't have that many verses. It was good though! I really liked it, and I could see it with a rhythm and some music in it. I think you should add onto it, and give it more of a central image/meaning, so we can better understand what you are talking about when you say reality, and lies. Are you a naive young person, or someone who just has been lied to?
simply put... absolutely love it.
It's original, different, emotional, excellently positioned, good for a tune.
only one bone to pick. It needs more. If actually converted into a song, it needs more. Maybe some kind of chorus.
otherwise, AWESOME
This is lovely and it tended to flow really well. If this was an actual song that was out, I'd definately buy it because I like songs that have meanings to the lyrics.
I liked your imagaray especially in the first and second verses, which were beautifully written. Keep up the good work.
=]
Wow
This is great.
It flows really well and your rhyming works really well
Super Work
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I love this! You have such a brilliant tune, the rhymes sound natural and the words are excellent. Seriously, these lyrics are brilliant and I wouldn't change a thing. Good work.