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Hello lovely, So this poem is really nice. I like how at the end it takes about how the guy is woken up, because in must poems, stories etc its ...

I liked this piece, and the only problem I had was when you described her little brother. At first you kinda made it sound like he was an older brother. ...

Hiya Mayyda, Ok so, I really liked this poem. The emotion behind it was great, and I could really feel what you were saying. However, I was kind of confused ...

I like the story, and the way that you ended it. I wasn't expecting him to kill her, or to do it in that sort of way. The only thing ...

There aren't many times when other people's art can inspire me to write, but this makes me want to put pen to paper and write something this bone chilling good. ...

So, I love the way this is written. It's short and sweet, but it's leaving me with some unanswered questions. What in the world has caused him to do all ...

Hello lovely, You've totally caught my attention with this piece. I only have a few things that I personally believe needs some fixing. The line "It was a night like ...

This was a wonderful piece. It had so many plot twists that I didn't see coming, and you could actually feel the emotions coming from Cameron. You switched tense a ...

Hmmm, I like this poem, but I feel like its missing some emotion. Like this piece explains what it is, but doesn't like show it...if that makes sense. I was ...

I like this poem, however, to me it seemed that you were talking about ungratefulness instead of a narrow mind. But then again that could be me. Either way, it's ...

So, I agree with Kat about how there's way too many this girl. It's very hard to read something that has the same repetitive in a story, it becomes, well, ...

Hmmm, I really like this poem. The meaning was very clear and easy to understand, however, the set up for this poem needs some work. (Don't worry i have problems ...

Oh my...this is by far one of my favorite poems I've read on here. It was so smooth and flowed together quite nicely. I had a few ideas, but thewritersdream ...

Hello lovely, First off, it's kind of hard to understand what it is you are trying to get across in this poem. There needs to be some kind of meaning ...

Wow, this is awesome. At first I was kind of scared to read it because you said it was random and I thought the plot of the story would be ...