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Nah... it's good. Because it's not just the poem you look at -- it's the title as well. And because the title was "Photograph" this clues us in to think ...

Hahaha... shouldn't the answer be 42? ;) Okay... seriously now, most of the poem is okay, but what I can't stand is the last line: Life + Meaning This is ...

Whee! Another work that I don't hate the writer for his/her lack of grammar! You don't know how nice that is. ;) But, unfortunately for you, I'm not going to ...

Oooo.... actually, I like that lack of comma because of the double meaning. I like haikus since they're so simple, but they usually aren't. The first line I love because ...

Other fiction, perhaps? ;) This had the chance to be really horribly angsty crap, but you've seem to avoid it, instead going into the mind of someone who was hurt ...

I think that it's perhaps a little too simple. That is, I think you're rhyming it too much. This might not be so bad, but the flow sounds so wrong. ...

Yeah... when you write poetry, you not only have to worry about the poem being good, but the title as well! If you are going to make a new work ...

*twitches* Okay... um... it really wasn't that bad. No seriously. If I were a writer, committed solely to the I can look at this and say, "Hey, this is fairly ...

I moved this in Original Fiction because dude! You want to get critiques on this, don't you? :D First of all, don't worry about pleasing everybody. You want to make ...

First of all, the grammar is kind of weird. If you have a cool English teacher, you might want to ask about using punctuation, where to put periods, and everything ...

Hehehe... you knew I was going to get to this eventually, right? ;) For this story, I think you're telling more than you're showing. So right now you're giving us ...

people should stop writing about him. his ego is big enough already. Hahaha... but this was in 2005, so he only gets a poem per year. :P

Hehehe... okay. Her purpose needs to be explained now. Either that, or you have to give us a description of what she looks like, a better one that is very ...

Her charcoal spheres pointed to the sky. Charcoal spheres? What's that supposed to mean? I've thought of three possible things, but two are rather... erm... strange. You might want to ...

You have all these lines that start with "when I..." but they have no conclusion to them, drifting off to another "when I..." This is weird and makes the poem ...