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Uhhh.. maybe my eyes get way too distracted, but take away the asterisk, please. Once I hit that asterisk, I get jogged back to reality and... I don't want to. ...

My bad! :P Okay... It looks pretty cool so far. The one thing I noticed that, on your main page, you have these bright vivid pictures on the right (balance, ...

XD This is a movie shoot, isn't it? Funny! And I love the line "speech bubbles" since it is so... fictional, and yet this poem seems very real. Nice job! ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! :D First of all, I want to say that your idea was very creative. It sort of reminds me of some of the stories I ...

Hahaha... that comment on the end is getting annoying. :P Anyway! I like the other poem better because it has more pretty imagery. This one... seems to be telling us ...

I liked it, but you need to fix the typos. ;) A mysterious and magical cretaure [should be creature], comes to us in dreams and stories always eluding us. Breating ...

It looks like this is a joke that was lengthened into a full short story. Unfortunately, I don't think you have transcribed it properly. For example, when you tell the ...

Any poem fits into other poetry. That's the beauty of it. ;) Okay! So the poem! I thought it would be better fit as dialogue or somewhere else in a ...

Ugh... too much physics for me right now. Still, you can always insert graphics in this piece by going to , downloading the pictures to the server, and then posting ...

Yay, we love experiments! This one didn't really hit it's mark though. I think you can keep the repetition of the first line, if you so desire so you can ...

I like this poem better than your other ones, but it could still use some tweaking that makes it better! First of all, proper punctuation can make the difference between ...

Okay, okay, I'll do it, lol. But beware! Usually I try to critique things with no posts, so if you put a comment too soon, I won't critique it as ...

Mmmm... it's in a very old-fashioned style that I'm not really a fan of (it's not your fault, really), so I won't waste your time talking about that, letting one ...

Heheh, I see what you mean. ;) The main thing about this is it looks like a morality poem, complete with a message and unafraid of screwing the message into ...

Ooo... I did like this. Yes, it is fragmented, but it's done in such a good way...! I shall tell you why I liked it line by line and hopefully ...