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...and back again! :D Because of this part 2, I think you need to develop the friendship between Ayda and Madeline more from the first section. As it is now, ...

I'm baaaaack! Ayda has a lot of courage to just go up to a species that she doesn't really know and talk with the human like that. I mean, if ...

Dun, dun, dunnnnnn! CLIFFHANGER! I am going to comment on random things that I am thinking while I read the story! Some of my advice WILL BE BAD because I ...

Hi Lumi! This is a really heart-breaking piece that shakes of emotion, so it's really quite good. I don't know if this is your intention, but when you write "and ...

Hi niteowl! I think you're missing out an opportunity to describe how uncomfortable you would be if you were crying while wearing safety goggles. At least in the labs that ...

This is a really confusing piece! You state at first that "we blame God for almost everything." I thought at first you were going to explain this statement a bit... ...

Pretty! My main review-like negative comment would be that I don't like the video game font that you used for "NO" because I think it's a bit too odd and ...

Hi! So, I am going to disagree with a bunch of previous reviewers on the whole, "Can you be four identities at once?" And that's because I've known a couple ...

Most of these were quite amusing, especially given how crazy obsessed many YWSers are about Nate! I especially like Reason 2. That made me laugh! A Nate cult indeed! Sometimes, ...

This is actually a pretty creepy piece, even if it's short. I think I would probably talk about what this film was originally supposed to be or the sort of ...

Ha! Oh man... my friend would enjoy this. She's in DA and she knows the feels. Her most popular works are... well, you know. The ones that identify with this ...

So... um... awkward question here, but have you made clothes using a sewing machine? Because it seems so weird that she would sew through her finger on a simple garment ...

So, I was thinking about this story last night, and I figured I would leave another comment, pertaining to this chapter, because I realized I missed something huge in my ...

I'm baaaaaaaaaaaaaack! :D Holding the banner of Team TARDIS as well! A quick comment... It’s brown with very fancy calligraphy all over it and my name is carved into the ...

Interesting premise! I'm not sure how realistic it is... I don't think humans would generally allow them to get enslaved by demons in this world while we have free will. ...