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Haha! So, I clicked this because it was in the green room, but I have to say... it's delightfully bizarre, quite creative, and very fun. I think my favorite part ...

Hi! What a strange first line! You both were wonderfully creative bringing that line to life like this! :o Were you intending to write this as if it were a ...

Okay! So, first of all, I am dumb. Really, really dumb. So dumb that I was absolutely horrified by your poem. See, I hadn't really paid attention to the "zombro" ...

Hi Sophie! You're totally right. The weather is too cold and the sky's not the right hue of blue. I mean, gray? That's totally not a shade of blue! :o ...

So, this poem has been on my mind for the past couple of days, though I haven't commented on it. Honestly, it makes me kind of angry because I want ...

This is probably going to be a controversial opinion, so you should probably ignore me, but I really adore the rhyming in the second stanza and almost wish you could ...

I hate to be that person, but... I am a Diest. you mean Deist? Also, "(and as always, London prevails)" should be "(And, as always, London prevails.)" Anyway, I am ...

Hi! Okay, first of all, I'll give you a warning... I have been working on a project that goes reeeeeeeally deeply into the Passion using art and whatnot, so that ...

This is a really cute poem that reminds me of some of the children's poems that I would read when I was younger -- something quick, clever, and has a ...

Hi niteowl! I... actually really like this poem because it describes what I've been slogging through for quite sometime. Which is a little funny, now that I glance at the ...

I'm not sure what angle you're going with this poem... it's so short, it's hard to tell, quite honestly! Still, it seems kind of like you're being darkly sarcastic, which ...

Hi, dystopianmonkey! One of the interesting things about this particular haiku (or senryu?) is the second line, where you talk about the dust of deception. The interesting bit is that ...

...and back again! :D Because of this part 2, I think you need to develop the friendship between Ayda and Madeline more from the first section. As it is now, ...

I'm baaaaack! Ayda has a lot of courage to just go up to a species that she doesn't really know and talk with the human like that. I mean, if ...

Dun, dun, dunnnnnn! CLIFFHANGER! I am going to comment on random things that I am thinking while I read the story! Some of my advice WILL BE BAD because I ...