Hi Sophie!
You're totally right. The weather is too cold and the sky's not the right hue of blue. I mean, gray? That's totally not a shade of blue!
Onward to the poem! I think my favorite part about this poem is "I'm feeling like your admiration is far too much, but yet not enough." I've felt that before with people who have had crushes on me, so I totally relate to this line. On one hand, they seem to slobberingly adore everything that you do, even if it's something you're actively trying to change about you. On the other hand, they don't connect with you and admire you in some way that you want to be admired.
Now! One little thing that kind of tripped me up was this line:
I'm feeling as if everyone's hushed conversation is still too loud, and my music couldn't possibly be louder.
The last bit of that line sounds a bit awkward. Like, I think I know what you're saying (your music can't be loud enough) but the way you phrased it is just a little awkward.
Anyway, nice stuff here!
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