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Hiiiiiiiii! I loved this fantasy story so much. I showed it to my brother, who is an analyst who lives and breathes programming for a living and my sister, who ...

Hi! Okay, full disclaimer... I am Christian here, but like. I want to help you with your imagery to make you get the gut punch effect on actual Christians that ...

Hi! OH MAN. So there are a lot of neat ideas in this part of the chapter. But like... I wish you just stopped and slowed down a bit and ...

Hi! When I saw that Arwen was the offering, I was like, "WAIT. DOES THAT MEAN...?" And then, because I am terrible, I scrolled to the end and realized, "YES. ...

Hi! I took a look at this because wars and swans always sound cool and I had to take a peek. :) Anyway, I would probably see if I could ...

Hello to my favorite 14-year-old!!! Okay, so I was silly and I thought that when you said "elfin girl" you meant "elf" especially when you mentioned the diminutive house. And ...

Hi! I just wanted to say that I thought this was funny. :) Just one comment for you... I would probably try to be more specific than "over there" regarding ...

Hi again! Okay, so the first paragraph, you use the word "it" very generously to the point where I am starting to long for an actual noun. Especially here: The ...

HI. You told me to read this in order, and so I shall start at the beginning! Rain pattered on the roof of the house with a soft lullaby, I ...

Hi Morrigan! Thanks for letting me review this poem! It's nice to review poetry again. :) So, this is an interesting poem because there is just so much visual imagery ...

Well, it certainly depicts the demonic quite well! The piece is strange. In the beginning, you say that the wounds that the demons heal are wounds that are unhealed -- ...

It's amazing how much emotional agony can wreck havoc with our bodies. I know that, speaking personally for myself, I tend to crave food when I am completely stressed out, ...

Hi Stella! My favorite part of this story is the descriptions of the rugged terrain that she is traversing across. It's really cool and very much science fiction and I ...

One thing that you might want to do that might make this pretty cool is to make Raven kind of sexy when doing this. She seems like she could totally ...

So, I read Chapter 1 and then, in the comments, found out that you had a prologue! So, of course I had to look! Most of it just seems like... ...