Hello!
I first wanted to say that I noticed from the comments that you are 14? If yes, than I am even more impressed.
Okay, let's dig in.
I want to start by saying that I really love your writing style and I would like to see you write more. There is something about the way you write that feels...mature. And, of course, really captivatiing.
"From the diminutive house, came an elfin girl in a bright daffodil dress..." These opening lines perfectly set the stage for something enchanting and mysterious and I knew straight away I am going to like this.
Your vivid descriptions and might I say, unique, storytelling grasped and drew me in.
My only slight little complaint is that I wanted more!:) The story left me with many questions about how the story might continue (and I hope you do), and I'm dying to know what happens next. I hope you continue Elizabeth's adventure or expands on this magical world.
good job!
Points: 20
Reviews: 5
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