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The ending of this was very cute I think. Actually, the ending was sort of perfect for the story. I appreciate how you made this so leveled and smooth. The ...

One word --beautiful. I really loved this. And although others may be able to find something off or fixable in this poem, I do not see a thing. Mostly because ...

I really like the idea of a poem based on fighting your own inner battles. I can relate to this because this is what the inside of my own head ...

The only thing I didn't quite like was the fact that this seemed so sudden and irrelevant to me when I first jumped into it. But as you said, it ...

The other reviewers seemed to have caught quite a few of the mistakes I would have. So I'll simply comment on the context of the writing itself. First off, I ...

Maybe you were going for a style, but there was really no punctuation at all apart from the exclamation marks. It seemed imbalanced, but maybe that's just me. This obviously ...

Hey, ThornedRose. This was a pretty short poem. I noticed a lot of commas where I would probably assume periods to be. It just felt sort of weird reading this ...

The way you wrote this was very nicely balanced in my opinion. I liked how you contradicted the statements and feelings with, But they don't, But it isn't, etc. Because ...

First off, I'd just like to commend you on how cute this was. (: I really did like it a lot. The only thing I probably would consider critiqueing would ...

I think this might be read a little neater if you added the proper punctuation. Sorry, it's just a pet peeve of mine. x) Also, because I noticed you added ...

I loved the words. Especially this: Infinite, hollow innuendos I'm tempted to steal that and put it somewhere x) But I won't. ..Anyway, the only thing that I personally could ...

This was entertaining in, probably, all of the weirdest ways. I liked it a lot. I'm sorry to say that I don't have much critique to give, because I doubt ...

My only suggestion is that you get rid of some of the "beeps" because you seem to be going a little beep-crazy : P I agree with this completely. Mostly ...

There're a couple critiques I'd like to give, before delving into the parts I liked about this piece. ;) I guess I'll start off with those so that I can ...

I liked this poem mainly for two reasons. One, your rhyme scheme flowed beautifully in my opinion. Two, the simplicity of it worked very well. This didn't exactly have to ...