Smilykid

This poem has a great message and down-to-earth feel. I like your simple diction (choice of words) and especially the way the poem is just laid out. Honestly, I don't ...

Fantasy is my favorite genre, so I'm always excited when I see a post under it. Your writing style is very fluid and descriptive. I also like the names. I ...

I like how personal this is. You know very well what you are talking about here and it shows. I agree with pandabear7 that the poem being free-verse is a ...

Having read part one, I think is a good follow-up chapter. I like how you introduce the other side to the story. I really have nothing bad to say about ...

You have the start to a good story here, it's interesting. It is a bit rough in places in terms of grammar, but a quick read-through can easily fix these ...

As a fan of Percy Jackson, I was pretty eager to read this. Fanfictions are hard for me because I have trouble fully grasping the scope of the characters and ...

Ah, I adore this story. It truly is a gem. The window you provide into this period of time is unprecedented. I'm growing very attached to the main character and ...

Haha! This is hilarious, mostly because it's true! If you go to high school you find these people ALL the time. They are absolutely obnoxious and no one wants to ...

Congrats on joining YWS! I have mixed feelings about this poem. While I certainly don't think it's bad, I feel like the rhyme scheme really limits where it can go. ...

This is the great start to a story. You instill a sense of mystery here that makes me want the next part of the story. I really like the beginning, ...

Wow, this is absolutely fantastic. Your writing style is so fluid and descriptive, I was blown away. As a fan of historical fiction (I'm writing one myself now) I know ...

I like this poem and its quirkiness. It makes the laughing shadow look playful and mischievous rather than a malevolent thing. The poem, in terms of content, is kind of ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! I think you have the beginnings to a great story here. You set up the atmosphere pretty well, and I love the irony in the scene. ...

Wow! Congrats on getting a review from our prestigious founder! I really like this poem, especially what it stands for. I agree with Nate that the one thing dragging this ...

Hello! Let me just say that I really like what you have here. Your writing style is very fluid and leaves nothing to be desired. I like the world you've ...